Open Poetry #21 |
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The Moonless Dog, The Godless Loon |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
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"The lunatic, the lover, and the poet are of imagination all compact" -William Shakespeare Rain rose reversed in a dream overnight, what fell to earth were strange faced bugs like blight, souls cursed where e'en in dreams peace extradites, What is worse the nightmare or lost Love's plight? I arose, graven starkness carved in bone naked, damp stunned as dull as cortisone, dripped slow realizing little bird had flown, no haven darkness when you're this alone It sunk in when you left you took the moon, peering cross the fenced yard where trash is strewn and white three legged pit bull is marooned and I as inviting as a ruin We'd forty days and nights, one more or less enough to flood a world or so I'd guess, I grieve Loves declaration, your egress it's all quite odd to me I must confess It matters not sun night or moony days awakened dark or sleeping solar rays when Love is not I'm knotted in a daze I'm loose and taut in hues of blues and craze. "Happy people have no history" - French Proverb [This message has been edited by RSWells (07-30-2002 03:17 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I do like the way your mind weaves a spell.... |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
![]() Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I know that this is a memory. . . but, I'm not sure if it's one that's been, or one that will be. . . excellent work Sir. . . flowing and showing. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Love is madness. The dream was real enough and the real an unwelcome interruption. The dog is my new friend and the owners don't know it. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Rain rose reversed in a dream overnight, what fell to earth were strange faced bugs like blight, souls cursed where e'en in dreams peace extradites, What is worse the nightmare or lost Love's plight? I arose, graven starkness carved in bone naked, damp stunned as dull as cortisone, dripped slow realizing little bird had flown, no haven darkness when you're this alone ========================================== It matters not sun night or moony days awakened dark or sleeping solar rays when Love is not I'm knotted in a daze I'm loose and taut in hues of blues and craze. ========================================== So much to see here...so many impressive lines...the rhyme and cadence..the internal rhymes...the alliterations...the personification, the imagery, the verbiage, word play and phrasing.... Have I mentioned before how I adore when you rhyme ![]() very very cool write poet sir...impressive indeed. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"It sunk in when you left you took the moon," ohhhhhhhhhhhh my...helen |
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