Open Poetry #21 |
On Matrimony |
wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
There is marriage in the air, here at PiP. For my friends, (you know who you are) a thought on... "Vows" It occurs to me that any two people Considering marriage need to realize That failure is not, an option You must eliminate the escape clauses Work without a net Overcome the trivial and it is all trivial I speak from some small experience of it I really do, wish that instead of parroting some rent-a-preachers words by rote I had just taken her sweet face into my two hands and said from my heart into the soul of her “I will not, fail you” ~wranx The shortest distance between two points... is sometimes, intolerable. Bukowski [This message has been edited by wranx (07-29-2002 09:29 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
wranx Touched me, you did...with these words. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Haven't I told you how much I love the softer side of you Ed??? this was truly heart thumping stuff... and? about the safety net? I guess a balancing order is in act here???? grins to you man!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
Truly beautiful, wranx. Very assuring guy you are! mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
That Damned Anvrill challenge got me all...you know. But, sooner or later some butthead will get me wranxed up about something and I'll be back to normal. Thanks devina ~wranx The shortest distance between two points... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
um, wranx? you doin' anything Thursday? smiles to you, appreciate this much, but mine is a long, complicated story... but know that I WISH it were like this. hmm. *shrug* who knows? Thank you. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Very wise words to the wedded. Joyce |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
wranx? I know this is a ladymelter but ahm goin say somthin anyway you could not be more RIGHT in this. once again blown away BS |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I like this new side of you, Mr.Wranx... very sweet. ~ hugs for the new Wranx Now if that doesn't get you wranxed up...I don't know what will Lyra |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thank yous, to Martie, mycafe and Joyce. I appreciate your comments and kindnesses. Brian ~ I may have leaned this late, but, learn it - I did. Madam "C" ~ It'll take a bit more than that, I'm afraid. But this "Worldcom thing" is really starting to get under my collar ~wranx The shortest distance between two points... is sometimes, intolerable. Bukowski [This message has been edited by wranx (07-30-2002 10:53 AM).] |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
You took the hollow out of the marital promise with much expressiveness entwined with logical forethought and incite. Very well done, indeed. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
It is nice to see your softer side, wranx. Ready to see an angry one? I'm going to write a nice angry poem in Dark called "Burning web of lies," simply because I want to. Look for it! (maybe it'll get you "wranx"ed up) Said if I only could ... |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
“I will not, fail you” damn you just put my heart in my throat |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx Good thoughts, good write, good read. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Who could ask for a better or more heartfelt vow? *S* I like this very much, wranx. *S* [This message has been edited by suthern (07-30-2002 02:30 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I had just taken her sweet face into my two hands and said from my heart into the soul of her “I will not, fail you” ----------------------------------------- wranx!! Do you not know that this is what every woman dreams of hearing??!!! OH!! SWOONING HERE!! Excellent write...perfect words. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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LilTai Member
since 2002-06-08
Posts 189United States |
I love this side of you, wranx...truly beautiful. There is so much truth and wisdom in your words..thankyou, I loved reading this Tai |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes. . . there are the words. . . I like this. . . it speaks on so many levels. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"I had just taken her sweet face into my two hands and said from my heart into the soul of her “I will not, fail you”" (big hugggssssss) Oh Wranx, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love it, we all wish these newlyweds the greatest happiness just as all their dreams are bound to come true! (sigh) This is beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Wranx, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Overcome the trivial and it is all trivial. Being married I can relate to this line. Quite a bit of truth spoken in this poem. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
My Hon and I have been married happily for 33 years. And every word you said is so so right on. A wonderfully encouraging poem on the joys of marriage. “I will not, fail you” I love this line... Hugs, Marti "Even if life is full of thorns, I still embrace it for I know that in between those thorns, there is a rose worth all the pain." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hi Wranx, I wonder if we learn from our experiences. I seem to make the same mistakes over and over again, I'm simply more conscious of them now. Good thought provoking poem. Corinne |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I will not, fail you. Yes. Perfect. BTTT |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well? I didn't know that this thing would draw a crowd. Thanks, all! Sheesh, who knew? ~wranx The shortest distance between two points... |
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Samantha G Kennedy Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 131Kent England |
last line is a killer! Bravo Wranx! Sammie ^i^ |
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