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Marry Me at Midnight
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Marry Me at Midnight |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Marry Me at Midnight I will meet you at 11:59 one moment short of yesterday one moment to forever in time Beneath the stars in light of moon by cool of night come then, soon Greet me there beneath fresh bower bring with you one white flower, For pure is this, my true love quite sure is this, my true love Cathedral bell will ring the hour loud from it’s escarped high tower By sixth chime Please call me “mine” by twelfth bong to you, I belong As the day of yester meets the morn of new we marry then at midnight and start the day in true ~*~ 6/2001 Revised 7/2002 [This message has been edited by Sunshine (07-28-2002 06:31 AM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
And when the moment passes as we share two chilled glasses will the love upon the chime last forever, for all time? Excellent writing LIW....enjoyed.. and good morning to you... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
How lovely and romantic dear Lady! So nice to see you posting here once more. Enjoyed this so much..it's simply beautiful! ~Hugs~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
OK I'll be there but I'm not sure I'll live up to all your expectations.....However, I'll really inspire a different type of thinking in you....Just me I guess???? You'll be forced to be pampered and spoiled and all I'll want is the same thing back equal shares of love!......DEAL???? Just kiddin....This is really is very nicely written..... "By sixth chime Please call me “mine” by twelfth bong to you, I belong As the day of yester meets the morn of new we marry then at midnight and start the day in true" Have a nice wedding! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lady This is almost as romantic as the glass slipper and the pumpkin. Beautifully done! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
What a beautiful thought!!! I've always had the notion that night time weddings are the best anyhow...and? you've mentioned our beautiful moon!!! I love it!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Tea Lady Junior Member
since 2002-07-11
Posts 26 |
Now this is a treasure. Pure romance! Smooth verse! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lady In White This is a keeper, excellent write. |
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R. Dean Junior Member
since 2002-07-26
Posts 37Illinois--USA |
The format is interesting, with the successive indentations showing the short passage of time, as opposed to the linear aspect of the poem itself. I would add some punctuation, and correct the inverted phrase in the penultimate stanza. Nice idea for the poem! Yours in peace, |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I dream ever so much of marrying my Joanna in the future and it must be so enchanting to share that kiss with the bride at midnights toll! (kiss on cheek) This is lovely, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Lady In White - very romantic, one white flower at 11:59. It's yours.... BC |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
A most wonderful thought ... tipping the scales of magic from mystery to wonderment Makes me want to dig out my tux |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
this is a beautiful poem so well written so wonderful to read - thanks - Paul |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A special moment captured in time, Lady in White... and in your lovely writing.  ~ chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Breathtakingly romantic!!! sweet I love it..It simply flirts with my imagination and romantic heart!! Kristen |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I like these thoughts...James |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Lady this IS a keeper. I love the flow and what you said in the poem. alan |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
Everything that's written here is perfectly beautiful. Lovely thoughts! mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh you big showoff  ahhh, but wasn't this just absolutely exquisite? You bet your bippy it was. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Such soft romance... so beautiful! *S* I like this very much, Lady! *S* |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
one moment short of yesterday right here. . . this is the key. . .places it in where it needs to be. . . wonderful. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Inescapably beautiful. She said burn ... together. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lady, I miss much when you are not here, but when you are we are treated with such wonderful imagery as this. I could here the bells chime and see the white flower he brought to her. Very well done sweets!! I caught a glimpse of this the other day at work but didn't have time to reply so I made a note to get back to this asap. Here I was thinking maybe someone had gotten married. Well, even if not this was simply lovely Sweetie. So very glad that I did! Treasure box bound this one is.  Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. {on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me} [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (08-02-2002 06:30 AM).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I really like this 'Lady'.... |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Soft and sweet. I like it. |
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