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RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

0 posted 2002-07-22 02:37 PM

The Error

If only I could let it go,
the scent of freshly moistened earth
floating from the surface
as the rake of the groundskeeper
arced a smile of dirt around third base;
the lack of sense to watch him work,
quick, deliberate,
his teeth sparkling through a grin
as focused as the white chalk baseline
over which he gingerly stepped
when he left the infield;
the light prophetic of his tone
as "She's a hot one,"
tracked me onto the diamond;
the nervous arrogance of cleats
scratching imaginary smoothness
into a field already perfect;
the spit; the slap into the glove; the wink
of recognition at the sudden glimpse
of my girlfriend pressed up against the fence;
the crack-like sound
and the instant, eternal remembrance
of a chance missed.

RMW

[This message has been edited by RMW (07-22-2002 02:49 PM).]

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

1 posted 2002-07-22 02:43 PM

Bob, you caught the "awful" moment

Well done, as usual, my friend.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2002-07-22 02:43 PM

Never an error to have tried...never never never....

an excellent write, Sir! You even made us smell the dust....

and hear the crack....

Welcome home!

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

3 posted 2002-07-22 02:47 PM

Interloper....your "awful" catches it all. I wish that I had thought of that. Thank you. Bob

Sunshine...thank you for the kind and attentive words. Bob

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2002-07-22 03:09 PM

Bob

You bring it to life until I'm sure I was there.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2002-07-22 04:33 PM

swing and a miss. . .

great work Bob, nice to see you again Sir. . .

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