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The Invisible Line
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The Invisible Line |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 The Invisible Line There is this, a raison d'être, to be where, where one may think they do not belong, perhaps so, perhaps so, sings the indiscernible voice song of inscrutable choice but it is to cross that invisible line invisible line the one placed there, in one’s mind and I stood where upper echelon live who aspired higher than I could give capturing words come through the sieve to hear again what once before was said to me as by implore travel on through any door. By a voice of one whose strengths has taken her to many lengths, I stood and felt I now belong sings indiscernible voice of song in this land of invisible line, if only and even in my mind, for she brought up words from my own past, brought them up in ways that last to take my worth, and value, true, to cast my dreams beyond the blue and steadfast, I took that deep slow breath, the one that tells me what I have left to make a decision, to spill the quill without derision, to fulfill my will ~*~ now I, now I shall skim the breeze with this inner sense of ease that all shall be as was before when first I traveled through the door and travel far, and long, and wide to cross this invisible line inside ~*~ Inspired by a speech given 19 July 2002 by Wilma P. Mankiller [This message has been edited by Sunshine (07-19-2002 03:55 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
beautiful Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*WOW* Karilea, stunning piece you present here!!!  Charisma |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
my mind should work so quickly. . . amazing. . . just amazing. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea This is full of beauty and power...yet so soft and fragile feeling, a muscle full of grace. Wish I had written this!!!  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
now I, now I shall skim the breeze with this inner sense of ease that all shall be as was before when first I traveled through the door and travel far, and long, and wide to cross this invisible line inside =========================== Just read your critique signature and though it is not the first time I read that "one" today, I find it funny that you want us to teach you when you are so far above most of our levels. Not intended to offend...just pointing out what "I" thought when "I" read it. Beautiful as always. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Whew...you're going deep on us here Sunshine girl! I keep tripping over that invisible line but I'm a much more clumsy than you are........This is really insightful writing! Excellent reading! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Absolutely beautiful!! ~Hugs~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Oh my gosh, I love this, sweet friend, I am not familiar with the works of Wilma P. Mankiller but I am intrigued after reading this marvelous and crisp expression from your heart! (big hugggssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, later I am going to type that name into Google and find out more about her, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Loner...thanks so much for the read... Charisma...where have you been keeping yourself, anyway? So good to see your name in the blue pages again...thanks for reading... Sven, hold the mirror up, sir...I'm trying to keep up with you!... Martie...a muscle full of grace? Now there is a metaphor that I wish I had thought of...thank you m'dear...truly, in taking the opportunity to see this amazing woman today, in listening to the underlying messages she did not know she was giving me, allowed some new direction in my mind to open up and say "why not?"....thank you, m'dear, for peeking in, and for giving in your way the encouragement as you have to do what I need to do... Not so funny, Mark, as I will always be learning, and of course I know you know that...I still have a long way to go, and another fifty or so years to get "there"...thanks for the eyes, cowboy...and keep teaching, okay?... No, ethome, I am the klutzy one of our crowd...you can't take that crown off my head, it's stuck tight...but deep? I hope so...I was reaching for this one, and I think you helped pull it out...write on, e-poet... Enchantress...thank you...for everything... Noah, your horizons will widen if you follow through and read up on this woman and her culture, and all that she has brought to so many....good man! Thank you! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
It is when you dig way down inside that these gems are found, and when you do find them they sparkle like no diamond I have ever seen. Why not indeed! Have I mentioned lately that I just love you to bits? karilea, this is without a doubt meant to give a message for those who will take the time to listen as you whisper the reason to be is in the living! Nothing means more to me than faith, family and my friends.  Proud Canadian [This message has been edited by Mysteria (07-20-2002 02:03 PM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
when you reach so deep like this lady, nobody can out shine you. Keep reaching lady, it is soooooo beautiful...Hugs to you. Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
By a voice of one whose strengths has taken her to many lengths, I stood and felt I now belong sings indiscernible voice of song in this land of invisible line, if only and even in my mind, for she brought up words from my own past, brought them up in ways that last to take my worth, and value, true, to cast my dreams beyond the blue and steadfast, I took that deep slow breath, the one that tells me what I have left to make a decision, to spill the quill without derision, to fulfill my will ~*~ now I, now I shall skim the breeze with this inner sense of ease that all shall be as was before when first I traveled through the door and travel far, and long, and wide to cross this invisible line inside =================================== Im sooo glad I didnt miss this one... this is lovely Sun...and yes...deep... deep from the place where the muse breathes and from the place where inspiration sustains us. I love the phrasing and word play in this... the way you carried out the whole theme to the perfect ending thought. very cool pick too beautiful write of muse and heart K.  How she loves me, I dont understand |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks for sharing the depths of your soul with us, Karilea... This poem is pure excellence.  ~ an invisible line of hugsLyra |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is simply superb, Sunshine... and touches me deeply in so many ways. *S* It leaves me grateful for all those who won't stay held back... and by stepping forth, become inspirations. *S* Lovely work! |
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