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elfin_tigress
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0 posted 2002-07-18 03:04 PM


Then Came the Rain

One night, I dreamed
That a butterfly chased me
Hunting me for sport.
That night, I dreamed
I was alone in a forest
A princess without a home.

One night, I dreamed
That alone in the woods
I was locked away
In a tall dark tower.
That night, I dreamed
Torns rose to my feet
And I cried.

Then came the rain.

One night, I dreamed
That I could fly
But then I would fall.
That night, I dreamed
I woke up hot and thirsty
Far away from home.

One night, I dreamed
That I wandered
Through the desert
That night, I dreamed
That the sun and the moon
Begged me to live
And I tried.

Then came the rain.

One night, I dreamed
I was a general
Leading an army
In a battle to lose.
That night, I dreamed
My soldiers lay helpless
At the enemy’s feet.

One night, I dreamed
I would give up my land
To wet dead tongues.
That night, I dreamed
Men screamed for me
To let them drink
Or all would die.

Then came the rain.

One night, I dreamed
I fell in love
With one I knew forever.
That night, I dreamed
I warmed his heart too much.
We were afraid.

One night, I dreamed
That he was burning
And I could do nothing.
That night, I dreamed
That I wept forever.
I thought I wept in vain,
And I cried.

Then came the rain.



© Copyright 2002 Claire Ring - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-07-18 03:10 PM


This is so sad. Enjoyed!

Cold hands means a warm heart

angelswing
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2 posted 2002-07-19 01:09 PM


Oh my god, this poem is so sad and so wonderful; The tale it tells has such great imagery, I loved it .
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3 posted 2002-07-19 02:37 PM


This was a wonferful but sad poem.

Juanita

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Goodknight
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4 posted 2002-07-19 02:58 PM


a very beautiful poem - full of many emotions and things to ponder and things to see - I liked it very much - Paul
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5 posted 2002-07-19 04:00 PM


(((warm hugs)))......so sad but incredible penned.....

Charisma

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6 posted 2002-07-19 04:36 PM


enjoy
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7 posted 2002-07-19 07:41 PM


this is very, very good. definitely raw... i like how each dream is a muted memory.
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8 posted 2002-07-19 08:00 PM




(big hugggsssssss) This is so very sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you, I have these thoughts too sometimes but I know with all my heart these visions will pass and true love is destined to come to you always! (sigh) My thoughs are with you, sweet friend, we all love you so much!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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