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bags123
Member

since 2002-06-06

Posts 128

0 posted 2002-06-13 03:46 PM

As a child
there was a night
I ventured out alone......
to lie in the tall grass
of a nearby field.

I had decided
quite impulsively........
to test my courage
against the phantoms and mysteries
which inhabit every childs mind.

Laying there,
the darkness seemed impenetrable
crickets scatched their ancient songs
I swatted at mosquitoes, hungry for my blood
Around me the grasses moved in random waves
dancing in the nightime breeze

Alone.....
I listened with a fierce acuteness
for the first sounds
of my imaginations monsters

Adrenaline pumped
thru my body
as I forced myself
to stillness.

Any moment now, I was sure.....
some unseen nightmare
would carry me away
to uncertain doom.
yet, I stayed to battle my demons.

Just then.....
at the moment of my greatest despair,
the clouds parted, and I saw,
perhaps for the first time,
the new moon cradling the stars

My fear ebbed away
like the tide of a great ocean
I was left with an unspeakable understanding,
to ponder thoughts much larger
than my own human fraility

Not so long ago
there was another night
I ventured out with you
quite impulsively

To again test my courage
against the phantoms and mysteries
that inhabit the mind
when love has been betrayed

The darkness seemed impenetrable,
cynics sang their ancient songs,
I swatted at emotions like mosquitos
hungry for my blood

I listened to you
with a fiece acutness
waiting......
for the first sign of my imaginations
monsters

Then.....
you smiled
and in that one gesture...,
I remembered the moon and stars

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2002-06-13 04:00 PM

THIS is one incredible write!!!
Fantastic!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

2 posted 2002-06-13 05:08 PM

Now this is what I call a true adventure...

enjoyed reading!

~R.T.

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

3 posted 2002-06-13 08:37 PM

Excellent, it puts you completely into the center of it.
Sandra

Magicmystery
Senior Member

since 2002-02-13

Posts 821
Windsor, Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2002-06-13 08:46 PM

oh how incredibly stunning! I loved every line of this... and I loved how you tied your two fears and their evaporation together. And I loved thesel lines the most.

The darkness seemed impenetrable,
cynics sang their ancient songs,
I swatted at emotions like mosquitos
hungry for my blood.

it is such an adorable comparison... I am glad someone wrote it down....

Sherry

Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow.
But above all... be kind to yourself today.

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

5 posted 2002-06-13 08:48 PM

The darkness seemed impenetrable,
cynics sang their ancient songs,
I swatted at emotions like mosquitos
hungry for my blood

Beautiful imagery here, Bags..and a nice poem too!

~ moonlit hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

bags123
Member

since 2002-06-06

Posts 128

6 posted 2002-06-13 09:20 PM

Appreciate it everyone. This was written for my wife about our 1st date. Kinda scarey at first!

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

7 posted 2002-06-13 09:50 PM

Awesome...you have certainly given us some
very noteworthy poetry to read...and this
certainly is just that....

I remember my first date with my wife...
It was scary for me too...

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 2002-06-14 03:09 PM

This is a wonderful, captivating write, bags... I enjoyed very much!

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

9 posted 2002-06-14 03:18 PM

Very good write Bags! Captivating to say the least....nicely presented!

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