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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 2002-07-17 07:19 AM


do you sleep well
in the arms of summer
knowing very well
that it still is winter
in other parts of the land
for someone else
who might have
or might not have
meant something
to you

you know,
warmth and cold
are just extremes
there are millions
in between
fighting to ever improve
their social status
by climbing up the ladder
by saving one more coin
than that was saved,
the night
before

do you realize?

we all pay in strange currencies
some with fame, others with shame
some with glee, others with pain
some with some, others with none

do we realize?

that this is slow man’s land
where the whole lot
seem to be too slow to grow
and those who find speed
sky rocket their way
fast and furious
towards the power of control
over the rest of them on
slow man’s land

loose change to the fast
is a lottery to the slow

no wonder,
there are many
lotteries to be won
in slow man’s land


© Copyright 2002 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-07-17 08:33 AM



I knew a gentlemen once
that neighbors referred to
as a slow sleeper...

he would have liked this poem...

Kethry
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2 posted 2002-07-17 10:24 AM


Sudhir,
it seems all life is a gamble but if we are wise it could be a gambol.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
3 posted 2002-07-17 11:18 AM


loose change to the fast
is a lottery to the slow


so true, I enjoyed your perspective on the challenge

*s
M

bsquirrel
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4 posted 2002-07-17 01:13 PM


Yep, I REALLY need to do this challenge. Great job!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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5 posted 2002-07-17 01:27 PM




BRAVO!!! Yes, yes, and life is indeed a game of russian roulette but if we play our cards in accord to the heart, we won't fall! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

the_loner_23
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6 posted 2002-07-17 01:36 PM


That was great

Cold hands means a warm heart

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2002-07-18 12:39 PM


we all pay in strange currencies

and..."whew..." Sudhir sizzles! You are a fountainhead of wisdom, m'friend. Every time I read you...I swear to behave and do yoga! (sometimes? I even bribe myself by thinking of the flexibility!)

You do amaze me, and I am so enjoying the differences of perspective one simple phrase can evoke. And...ahem...speaking of phrases?

May I ask, if we borrow the term "strange currency/ies" for another challenge?

If you prefer not, I understand--I'm just having a good time, and well, I'm not known to "settle for one."

Wonderful work...to be expected from a wonderful poet!

Poet deVine
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8 posted 2002-07-18 01:10 AM


Oh my I love this:

"loose change to the fast
is a lottery to the slow"


How wise these words are! Challenge well met sir.

Sudhir Iyer
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9 posted 2002-07-18 04:28 AM


thank you all so very much...

and Serene One, you may use the phrase if you wish to...

Regards,
Sudhir

Madame Chipmunk
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10 posted 2002-07-18 12:49 PM


do you realize?

we all pay in strange currencies
some with fame, others with shame
some with glee, others with pain
some with some, others with none

This is so true, Sudhir...
Its profound and yet its mundane at the same time...but most of all...its beautiful poetry
strange currency hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

MidnightSon
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between the gutter & the stars
11 posted 2002-07-19 04:03 AM


fascinating... this inspires me to no end....
*heads off to notebook*

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

Sudhir Iyer
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12 posted 2002-07-19 09:45 AM


thank you very much...

regards,
sudhir

Mark Bohannan
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13 posted 2002-07-19 11:06 AM


Sir ... you are on fire in this one and I am enjoying reading your wisdom again.  You have always portrayed a mind that never stops to rest in your writes and this one is packed with much to consume.  Excellent penning one to reinforce why your works are so appreciated and admired.  Saving this one to my library.
Sudhir Iyer
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14 posted 2002-07-29 11:20 AM


Thank you Mark...

Regards,
sudhir

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