The Battered Door: A Gloom Sonnet

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Open Poetry #21

The Battered Door: A Gloom Sonnet

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2002-07-15 08:02 AM

It’s an old door battered and worn by time,
Still shut against the violence and crime
That ravages the neighborhood around
With screams and shots and siren’s wailing sound.

What is beyond this portal midst chaos?

There are no numbers to define local
Nothing noteworthy about it at all,
A well worn handle and lock holds it shut,
Along a wall of dirt, grim, and of soot

What is beyond this portal midst chaos?

Oh what might you dream about that place is,
A refuge or a pleasant oasis,
Perhaps nothing more than an empty room,
Where in dwells despair and lingering gloom.

Gloom

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-07-15 08:47 AM

You do make the cliché come alive,
with "it's all in your mind..."
a good read, Professor...thank you...

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-07-15 02:52 PM

Speechless

Cold hands means a warm heart

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2002-07-15 11:07 PM

"Oh what might you dream about that place is,
A refuge or a pleasant oasis,"
Perhaps nothing more than an empty room,
Where in dwells despair and lingering gloom."

A pleasant refuge, empty but for a lingering of want...well that's where I reside...
I probably interpreted you wrong PG but I thought I'd give you a try.

p.s. did you mean this line to have GRIME instead of grim?
Along a wall of dirt, grim, and of soot

it could be either I suppose *s...

~soft smiles~
M

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (07-15-2002 11:08 PM).]

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

4 posted 2002-07-15 11:23 PM

I haven't read you in a while because I'm not here as often. If I have passed you up then forgive me.

enjoyed.

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

5 posted 2002-07-16 01:07 AM

How do you make depression so interesting?
Excellent poem. It reminds me of my old neighborhood. Finally had to move...

Shenachie

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

6 posted 2002-07-16 02:14 AM

this battered dor
loves this work
you've penned

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