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Open Poetry #21

Unconscious Dancers

mable_sue
Junior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 25
Iowa

0 posted 2002-07-14 09:31 PM

Unconscious Dancers

I watched you sleep
the other day.
It was late afternoon.
The sun was still creeping
through half-opened blinds
leaving you
with only
striped warmth.

I wondered if you
unconsciously noticed
the dust particles
mischievously dancing around
your nose
and prickly chin.

Oh what fun
they must’ve been having
as your nose breathed them in
and shot them back out
to dance again
in the sun’s fading rays.

You turned then,
using your left hand
to swish at your nose
moving the dancers
to your sun striped back
joyfully rolling
to your heavy, slow breaths.

I watched the dancers
that afternoon
frantically playing
around your beautiful sleep.
You were the stage
for an exquisite performance.

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

1 posted 2002-07-14 10:00 PM

a unique look mabel sue
enjoyed this
BS.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-07-14 10:18 PM

Awesome poem.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-07-15 07:02 AM

See? About that time,
I would reach over to tickle the stage awake....

Neeraja
Senior Member

since 2002-06-22

Posts 812
The Netherlands

4 posted 2002-07-15 07:13 AM

What a sweet...cute poem!

Neeraja

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