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A Visitation
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A Visitation |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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"Visitation" This afternoon while walking my Damndogs (an endearment) an unfamiliar old minivan came trundling down the rutted dirt lane that meanders between my shack and the river The Damndogs, anticipating A break in routine Trotted down to meet This stranger and escorted Him back toward the shack Behind the wheel was an older fellow perhaps a generation older than myself “You lost, Skipper?” I enquired of the driver “Not really, just exploring, nice spot you got here.” And that started a conversation in which we learned that we had each owned a couple of bars married a couple of women drank a few beers caught a few fish read a few books lost a couple of houses lost a couple of bars and couple of wives At this point, I realized that my pets were wandering off in separate directions catching up on aromas So, I told the stranger that it had been nice to make his acquaintance but, I had to round up my cats (because it is often like that) “Cats?” he says, leaving “That’s funny, I thought they were Damndogs”. As we watched him rattle his way down that dirt track, I had the oddest of feelings I felt that that old man was, indeed, lost I felt that that old man was me ~wranx "Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do...provided it's done in private and you wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wranx...a very good write! I could even smell the dust and feel the heat of the sun... |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
Nice write. a look into the future! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) YAY!!! Hey, this is Noah from Poets Passing Place (Shakiras Butterfly). I always love your wonderful words and just had to read this one, this indeed has great depth and levels of thinking, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Wranx, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Visually impressive and I liked the concept. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Music Maker Member
since 2002-07-07
Posts 152THE ORIGINAL !!!! |
I am penning this as I prepare to go to bed, but before this I must take my dogs for a walk (a euphamism for 'to relieve themselves!). Yes, They are the ones to run towards a stranger in the road, to test them out, as to whether they will be accepted, on their territory, and I trust their instincts more than my own. Oh Yea, I have been there too, lost a few material things along the way - but what matter. You and I are both happy and content. Lovely words that paint a magnificent picture in my mind. Kind thoughts, John. Grass won't grow under feet that don't move. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I like that they're Damndogs and not damn dogs. Glad yr peeping into Open for this!She said burn ... together. |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
I have to tell you wranx that I really really liked this story. Interesting!! mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Amazing what we find in common with perfect strangers isn't it? This was refreshing in an odd sort of way and I enjoyed it thoroughly. Sounds like a nice place you have! |
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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279 |
~,..."like bowling or decoupage", lol, hope not a passing thing this. As I so enjoyed. *Peace. |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Amazing reflection. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Alicia...I saw that too...funny guy, eh? And this is a wonderful write wranx...you are one fabulous teller of tales, and I do love the wry and edgy sort of sarcasm of your style. I have become a fan. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
another out of the park, old man  this sort of reminds me of Bukowski Don't know if you've read him but he's write up your dirt lane stay loose shackman BS. I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
I like how real all your poems seem. Concrete but still poetic. And this one is most definitely tripped out enough to give you something to think about. "Silly bunny, there are no monsters in here." - Chrys, from Gloom Cookie |
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