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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Would you be able to find me tonight, Given the new moon and all? Within the unlimited ceiling, You may see a glimpse of me Racing around your peripheral... These lines just amaze me-- They remind me of the first time I saw you catch one of those breezes-- The kind that take my perception higher. Could you find refuge in one of those The same way I did? Could you hang on to it throughout the night Just like the fatigued hands of my fading resolve? It was only the repeating refrain That kept the completion widespread. This outstanding release quickly found the road That ends at the door to my frozen stamina, Where it met me on the top step, Handing me the rose of abandon-- The permission to leave behind The inhibitions that hid me from your perusal. I've given it all to the stars; I've always wanted someone to take it. Now I write of watching it fly away And wonder where it's going. But it's good to be opened; It's liberating to fly around your soul, Watching the waves crash onto shore And refresh your ability to impart the tide. When my heart aches, I'll take a moment to find the side And partake of your diamonds... -kh '02 Hey  , here...now you can stop harassing my life...  LOVE YA!I want to wake up to the sound of waves |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like this Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I've given it all to the stars; I've always wanted someone to take it. Now I write of watching it fly away And wonder where it's going. Harrassing seems to lead to some great poetry! Much related to the 'wonder' of this. How many redheads will it take to get one little puppy to class? |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
mz pants you got a big ol box of good stuff just opened and dumped on purpose in fast forward slow motion dug it |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Would you be able to find me tonight, Given the new moon and all? Within the unlimited ceiling, You may see a glimpse of me Racing around your peripheral... ======================================= Could you find refuge in one of those The same way I did? Could you hang on to it throughout the night Just like the fatigued hands of my fading resolve? It was only the repeating refrain That kept the completion widespread. This outstanding release quickly found the road That ends at the door to my frozen stamina, Where it met me on the top step, Handing me the rose of abandon-- The permission to leave behind The inhibitions that hid me from your perusal. I've given it all to the stars; I've always wanted someone to take it. Now I write of watching it fly away And wonder where it's going. ================================ When my heart aches, I'll take a moment to find the side And partake of your diamonds... ================================= How am I supposed to pick fave lines when you write about my fave subject? Moon, Stars and Diamonds  (neenur)Well the imagery in this is just too cool... the whole poem sparkles with star shine and promises kept. Of things to come ... of the contentment that is found when we trust ourself with-in the love of another. I also love the depth of the self discovery this piece speaks of ...the self realization. I just love the honesty and acceptance of this verse I've given it all to the stars; I've always wanted someone to take it. Now I write of watching it fly away And wonder where it's going. Beautiful mix of images and emotion. I'd tell you that someone inspires beautiful things in your pen..but thats already obvious in this jewel and....( his heads already much too big for his hat) Now...about that "frozen stamina" (turn off the fan and lose the ice pack frostybritches)  wakka wakkaYou cant expect a moth to be good all the time can you??? Thanks for the view of the stars girlie. some of them were aquamarine and emerald  Now for me some words come easy |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
PS... TAKE THE BOXES........... hehe  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I guess you showed him...and the rest of us!  It's been a while since we've seen your pen in motion...please don't keep us waiting so long... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
When you gave me this the other night to read, I knew it had to be posted. It is definitely one of your best. You continue to grow in both your poetry and in yourself and I love watching every step you take. The breezes you speak of me catching are always at your fingertips and if you reach out with open heart and soul and pull them in with a gentle touch, then you too will feel the comfort and insight they offer. You are sooooooooo close to getting there, and I know that one day SOON you will and I will be there when you do. You have developed a beautiful gift of imagery in your writing and you continue to take the thoughts of life and perspective to boundless ends in your works. Realizing, learning, growing, sharing, and then teaching ... that is what life is all about and you showcase this well in your write. Loved it and love you sweets. ps. Don't forget to take the BOXES!!!! LOL |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) This is wonderful, sweet friend, I just love the wonderful sincere sentiments you weave, may you always hold these diamonds true to your heart and may they always be there to shimmer on every gray day! (big hugggsssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Outstanding poetry. Nice to read you again. Sandra |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Snow~ Girl you can write! Look forward to reading you more often. Well done! Deb |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Kris, I knew I was in for a delight when I saw this title with your name next to it...I must agree with the others who have replied before me...your work has grown tremendously. Constantly you are striving to be better, and you continue to reach new goals and the stars in both your writing and your life. it's been an honor to be a part of some of this journey. best wishes to you always and i look forward to reading more magic from your pen. for what it's worth kris... i sit in both awe and envy. take care. aims "you can't stop |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
snowpants, I was really touched by this. You have created such beautiful images in my mind. Well done, another beauty from your pen for my library. Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
snowpants, it's all good. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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