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Ghost Breeze
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Ghost Breeze |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA 
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On a summer's deep night, brightened by starry darkness memories stirred the larks that once sang in me Bat-blind thoughts flying aimlessly in search of an unhurried arm of Ghost Breeze This unseen rainbow in silent moon's blush goading a mind with deliberate courage such a strength of the past lodged in braided thought I could not deny it, nor turn away. I saw through a gauze of confusion, the wandering cry of Ghost Breezes, eerily creaking from past stories deceptively calm, enticing I would not allow my old cares to be cooled by this false aire of comfort. Go haunt another!I implored the spectres I live of the Now and shall not be mocked or scorned by your windy guilt nor gaze into your tar-pitched eyes It circled for a moment more before I breathed out ancient dust in its face! cutting the roots around my heart and watching the Ghost Breeze quietly perish on a midnight vine |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This unseen rainbow in silent moon's blush goading a mind with deliberate courage such a strength of the past lodged in braided thought I could not deny it, nor turn away. wow Jeff, incredible imagery in this. Powerful use of words... Stunning work .. Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. {on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me} [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (07-09-2002 09:35 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love it Jeff! Your imagery is beyond compare! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Jeff darling heart and writer of the wind, have you any idea how spectacular this poem is? No probably not since you entirely lack all conceit, then let me tell you darling heart it is awesome, and no I am not just saying that. Naturally the rhythm is perfect and the flow is utterly utterly spot on. Your writing is never less than perfect sometimes however even I am amazed at the beauty you mange to weave through your words. This is gorgeous, and IWIHWT. This unseen rainbow in silent moon's blush goading a mind with deliberate courage such a strength of the past lodged in braided thought I could not deny it, nor turn away. I saw through a gauze of confusion, the wandering cry of Ghost Breezes, eerily creaking from past stories These lines are so outstanding I’m breathless with awe, how can you weave the breeze so completely, I swear this is superb writing, utterly utterly superb, definitely one of your best darling boy, truly brilliant. Perfect writing darling heart absolutely perfect  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) WOW!!! Oh Jeff, this is excellent, sweet friend, I believe evety story lasts forever an dthe ghosts of the author will always be there to tell them over and over again! (big hugggssssss) This is powerfully haunting, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
To such a Gentle Spirit: conduit and inspiration the writing is automatic and the inspiration: true Thank you dear lady. Jeff |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Nance, with the flaming mind which has spread to her crimson hair: If you say it, i take heed otherwise, i never know the good ones from the clunkers (unless i drop them on a hard surface, of course! hehehe) Thankx N, and ~huuug~ jeff |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Marsha, i spent a summer's day, roasting in the heat that cowered behind storm clouds writing of a haunting memory that has an origin from no retreat Hope you and Emma/Krissy are well. Thank you, Maaaaaaashhhha and give everybody a hug from Dulcy, Batguy and myself, will you? Jeff |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Noah, ol' buddy, your astute always gives me the ol' heart-smile: that deep knowing smile that warms Merci, beaucoup, mon bon ami! jeff |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jeff Sometimes the ghosts tickle a place that needs a slide of memory before the wave of goodbye. You are such a deep thinker..and a wonderful poet. Thank you for that. |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
I liked this part best: quote: The finality of putting the past behind you in order to embrace the future was spellbinding...awesome write sweetheart! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
wonderful poetry - deep thinking - powerful images - just great - thanks for the read - Paul |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ShadowRider A very good literate write. Enjoyed the trip. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Bat-blind thoughts flying aimlessly in search of an unhurried arm of Ghost Breeze Lovely imagery, Jeff....and deep thoughts expressed in beautiful writing.  ~ ghost hugsLyra |
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