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I'm Melting
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I'm Melting |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I'm Melting The sky is a slate and I am drowning in air, the cement cries a soprano whale song from my water of the wilt into dry dirt tears. The nectarines are hiding under green umbrellas, the gold fish are down in the dark belly pond, the sunflower is bent and broken, the birds are panting, poetry even melts like last nights candle it folds and splays and slithers across the table as the sun burns white and the clouds billow around the mountain waiting for upheaval. I'm melting, the words slide in my mind I am to slippery to hold their flame, it burns holes in my quiet space as I dangle over the still lake of reverie until I am undefined hot wax and hold no form as the sun taunts my need to write with a lethargy of spirit that refuses to sing. -------- 8-00 |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sweetie, it's 7:44 here and 102...with 107 being the heat index...you're hot? LOL...so am I...and your poem was like liquid wax....something to play with during the heat of the day... so enjoyed the green umbrellas over the nectarines.... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
sitting here shaking my head and wondering how do you do this? This is fabulous Martie, your use of words just flow from your pen of divine style. I love it hon. Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful Martie! Full of great colors and fantastic imagery! WoW! You are SO good! ~hugs~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Whazz the prob ladies...... It is only about 84 here....a fairly pleasant day..... Go soak some flowers or something and while you are at it... just pour it over your lovely heads at the same time.... What do you mean??? Go do what???? |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Oh Martie, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, yes, may your heart always melt with the beauty of passion and poetry and may all your dreams melt with your reasons to craft such beautiful imagery as you always do! (kiss on cheek) This is superb, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
If I were just candle - would I feel the hot wax of yesterday sliding down my sides could i stand there and bear the pain of flame? Jeff Stunningly good writing, Martie. Masterfully done, my lady! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
The sky is a slate and I am drowning in air, the cement cries a soprano whale song from my water of the wilt into dry dirt tears. Oh Martie...I love the way you can take these differing elements and combine them into a very beautiful poem... I so admire your talent...  ~ hugs of admirationLyra |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
All I can say is awesome. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie.. darn it was hot here too..got up to 76 degrees..had to take my long sleeve off. (wicked grin) sure like this poem babe |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh Martie this truly is an amazing write, filled with the most heartrending thoughts...well penned. ~hugs~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
neat write...we're on the melt too, but prefer to think cool...listen isn't that what the wicked witch of the west said to Dorothy..why I've got an idea for a cute write [This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-10-2002 09:49 AM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am to(too) slippery to hold their flame, I felt this way all last week when it was well over 100 here. M |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
How apt for this hot spell we have been having! It does feel like everything is melting, even resolve! ~sigh~ Very well said Martie, you are a superb writer! I so enjoyed the images you painted here and could relate! Beautiful! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
How very descriptive, and I have felt this way. You tell it so well. Nan |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Your words are like mist that forms the dew.  |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
now that is hot! I remember well the heat of CA and how oppressive it can be - here in OH you can't tell if you melt as the humidity is so high you are just added to the puddles of all the rest of the melts - thanks for a great poem - I liked it lots - Paul |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I'm melting just thinking about you dangling over the lake!!! LOL Exquisite is your mind no matter what the weather is like. We have the heat here as well, but I do know where the ocean is and believe you me, it knows my toes when I goes to indulge in it's throes. |
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