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Open Poetry #21

Intertwined (edited lol )

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2002-07-05 07:06 AM

Intertwined

brushing
I find
a tangle
no maybe
a knot

for

as we
brush against
each other
we tangle
in a
lovers knot

[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (07-05-2002 05:53 PM).]

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2002-07-05 07:08 AM

I really like the undertones in this!

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

2 posted 2002-07-06 03:15 AM

*sigh*
beautifully done

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

angelswing
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since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

3 posted 2002-07-07 10:19 PM

Wow, the knot idea is great, lovely poem; a fantastic read . Thanks .
L.of.L. Tom .
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'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'.

Krishankins

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since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

4 posted 2002-07-07 10:20 PM

I like the vision you planted in my mind with this! Stop it!!!!

Kris

A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2002-07-07 10:27 PM

Cool write Helen..
I'd like to have seen the unedited version! LOL
~Hugs~

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

6 posted 2002-07-07 11:47 PM

To we or knot to we, that is the quest.

mycafe
Senior Member

since 2002-05-23

Posts 584

7 posted 2002-07-08 12:29 PM

This is really cute. Lovers intertwined... so literally expressed by you

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

RosePetal

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since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

8 posted 2002-07-08 01:19 AM

can i find the un-edited version in the adult room? I like this!

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

9 posted 2002-07-09 04:12 AM

1slick_lady-
Very simply done, but with depth of thought.
I enjoyed this.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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