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TwoHeartsOnePen
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since 2002-06-07
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state of determination

0 posted 2002-07-04 01:29 AM


Beginning with eyes
meeting and shedding all doubt.
The shadows of a night arrested our bodies
as we fell to a new place in love.
Mundane demands to take care of
bags in car
seatbelt
felt like we were snuggling into our own private heaven session.
Watching the lights
the drivers
wondering at shyness
as our hands fell comfortable into each others
and eyes rested on all the parts
we had longed with our souls
to see standing before us.
The hardest decision
was whether to get food and settle into an all night restuarant
or surround ourselves
with the solitude of each other.


Distance is the prison for our bodies, but no prison could weaken our passion.

[This message has been edited by TwoHeartsOnePen (07-04-2002 01:29 AM).]

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ethome
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1 posted 2002-07-04 04:58 AM


I'd take the solitude after the restaurant....Just kidding..
This wanders through your thoughts so nicely opening up poetic doors to view your feeling through images.
Nice writing!

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2002-07-04 06:08 AM


Like it...James
Poet deVine
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3 posted 2002-07-04 05:20 PM


This sounds like reality...a lot of poems describing meeting, are just that - describing it - I feel like I'm there with you. (look under the seat for PdV!)
Sven
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4 posted 2002-07-05 03:43 PM


yes, I'm going to agree with deVine on this one. . . you take the reader there. . . and, I would have went for food first. . .

great work. . .

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5 posted 2002-10-02 10:50 PM


But this is food.
In many ways.

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