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Martie

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0 posted 2002-06-30 11:44 PM

Cloak and Tender

So quickly the evening falls
into the movement of trees I feel morning
like a portent in a hot cup
it is brewing as your bag is packed
your shirts all numbered and caressed
as my eyes seek to remember their fall

You check the garden and give it your hand
like a woman who is dry
it turns dark and moist from your careful water
and I listen to the greening that comes from seed
the sound is tender as cracked dirt
like your eyes closing and filled with shadow
or the silent movement of the worm
it is part of the earth breathing

I would be your cloak and tender
slip inside where pockets wait your hand
and be pulled out important and bright
to watch your charm arrange the sky
and make it more than what it was

But some things are yours alone
to glory be just you ..not me
so I left a present there in your open palm
and should you feel a warm spot
it is just my love

[This message has been edited by Martie (07-01-2002 09:36 AM).]

EagleScorpion
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1 posted 2002-07-01 12:11 PM

hey i like the way you use the metaphors with the garden and the worm and whatnot. Hey goodbyes are never easy, Martie, but try and convince yourself that this person remains with you always through the love that you showed this person

Krishankins

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since 2002-06-23

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Texas

2 posted 2002-07-01 12:47 PM

"should you feel a warm spot it is just my love" Powerful words!
Powerful poem!
Krishankins

A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground

bsquirrel

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3 posted 2002-07-01 12:50 PM

Ah, so nice to find time to read you again, Martie. I've missed yr words.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

Mysteria

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4 posted 2002-07-01 03:37 AM

And don't the shirts of a packed suitcase have a totally different aroma Martie? Or is it that we never hold or smell them that way until they are folded and packed. This made me smile so, as it is so you, yes that is why...it is just so very, very you! (and that is a good thing!)

Nothing means more to me than faith,
family and my friends.

Gentle Spirit
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5 posted 2002-07-01 06:39 AM

You check the garden and give it your hand
like a woman who Is dry
it turns dark and moist from your careful water

as if those words weren't awesome enough then....

But some things are yours alone
to glory be just you ..not me
so I left a present there in you open palm
and should you feel a warm spot
it is just my love

one word hon
INCREDIBLE!

Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal.

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me}

ethome
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New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2002-07-01 06:48 AM

Martie...What can I say........Once again this is exceptional writing!

             "But some things are yours alone
              to glory be just you ..not me
              so I left a present there in you open palm
              and should you feel a warm spot
              it is just my love"

And what a wonderful love and respect for life you possess.....Remarkable writing!

Janet Marie
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7 posted 2002-07-01 08:53 AM

So quickly the evening falls
into the movement of trees I feel morning
like a portent in a hot cup
it is brewing as your bag is packed
your shirts all numbered and caressed
as my eyes seek to remember their fall
==================================

I would be your cloak and tender
slip inside where pockets wait your hand
and be pulled out important and bright
to watch your charm arrange the sky
and make it more than what it was

But some things are yours alone
to glory be just you ..not me
so I left a present there in you open palm
and should you feel a warm spot
it is just my love
==========================

There is so much warm here to touch....
my goodness girlie...what a beautiful moment of inspire this is.
Makes me sigh just thinking about the depth of this ones tenderness.
What a gift of heartwords this is.
Fold it and put it in his pocket...
he'll feel the warm from it all day

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

8 posted 2002-07-01 09:11 AM

Martie,
My pick,

I would be your cloak and tender
slip inside where pockets wait your hand
and be pulled out important and bright
to watch your charm arrange the sky
and make it more than what it was

Love the way you arrange words.

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

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Ohio, USA

9 posted 2002-07-01 09:50 AM

Martie - such wonderful metaphors and i just enjoyed reading it over and over - thanks for the wonderful poem - Paul

Neeraja
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The Netherlands

10 posted 2002-07-01 10:04 AM

I had such a good time reading your poem....

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

11 posted 2002-07-01 11:36 AM

...Exquisite!!...

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

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West Coast

12 posted 2002-07-01 01:50 PM

artist martie
you do landscapes
in nude glass colors
can smell the lovely of them

S Arthur Grey
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 719
woven by a poet's loom

13 posted 2002-07-01 02:19 PM

What a pleasure to read your words!

S Arthur

. . . Hills jump with brooks.
trees tumble out of twigs and sticks;
e e cummings

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

14 posted 2002-07-01 03:09 PM

Opening your poems
is a welcome reprieve
no matter what time of day
or night...
or where I find them...

Martie

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California

15 posted 2002-07-01 03:23 PM

Eagle--Yes, goodbye's always happen, luckily this one won't be for long..thanks.

Kris--Thanks for the powerful..I like that word.

Mike--I've missed your replies..good to see ya!

Sharon--Thanks for understanding about the shirts.

Donna--So glad you liked it..always good to see you!

Eric--You always say the right things.

Janet Marie--I'm hoping it lasts 10 days!

Sy--the feeling is mutual.

Paul--thanks for the "over and over".

Neeraja--I'm glad you did..thank you.

Nancy---awwwww!

DS--Your replies are almost as pretty as your poems.

S. Arthur--Then I thank you for reading.

Karilea--You're late..I was worried.

Auguste

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By the sea

16 posted 2002-07-01 04:18 PM

Mister Toe will love this, Martie

Marge Tindal

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17 posted 2002-07-01 08:35 PM

Martie~
You wear the feelings so well~

'I would be your cloak and tender
slip inside where pockets wait your hand
and be pulled out important and bright
to watch your charm arrange the sky
and make it more than what it was'

My, my ... the loveliest of the lovely entirety~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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