Keeper of dreams - dactylic and some meter LOL - classwork

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Titia Geertman
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0 posted 2002-06-30 08:30 PM

Keeper of dreams, in my heart he will rest, till the dawn of the day comes to rise,
Holding him tight, I will cherish him there, for he always is in for surprise.
Last time I dreamt it was such a weird dream and I know that he smiled towards me,
Walking a path crossing meadows with sheep, but the grass was not grass it was tea!

Somehow the sheep they could swimm very well, while they sucked in their food with a straw,
Couldn't believe that I saw what I saw, but they waved at me with their wet paw.
Scared me to death, so I ran rather fast towards I thought was end of this road,
Holding my breath there was something real big, till I saw it was only a goat.

"Here now you swine" he was yelling quite loud, while he showed me an ear tag real big,
First I just laughed at the thought being tagged, but his serious face made me sick.
Tapping his back, I said "Sorry dear lad, but the tagging is only for sheep"
Walking straight through he just vanished in air and I sank in the tea really deep.

Then I was flying on wings of a dove, rather big, for my weight he could hold,
Nowhere in sight was a piece of my land, I could tell for the sun was too cold.
Then I woke up with the cat on my face and her fur was all wet, big surprise,
Keeper of dreams, in my heart he will rest, till the dawn of the day comes to rise.

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

[This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (06-30-2002 08:31 PM).]

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

1 posted 2002-06-30 08:33 PM

Excellent Titia!
I love it! A great story!
~Hugs~

Goodknight
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Ohio, USA

2 posted 2002-06-30 08:34 PM

really good poetry - enjoyed the story and such vivid images - thanks Paul

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-06-30 08:35 PM

You've got to stay away from the spicey stuff late at night, Titia!

Balladeer

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4 posted 2002-06-30 09:20 PM

WOWOW!!! This is great, Titia! The rythym and meter is absolutely perfect! It's almost like a psychedelic poem with impossible yet real visions running through the mind and making themselves sound plausible to the reader. I could imagine the Beatles singing a song with these kind of lyrics.....you did VERY good here!!!

Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07

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5 posted 2002-06-30 09:33 PM

AHA...that means I get an A+?????

Oh sweet friends it took a while but I think I get the hang of it, it 's just a matter of tapping your feet DUM da da DUM da da Dum

Before I finished I got the whole orchestra here in my room LOL

Thank you Master Deer