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cherrypoptart
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since 2002-06-09

Posts 109
state of wordthiness

0 posted 2002-06-30 06:26 PM

Oh they tell me that I've gone too far this time,
And they tell me that I've gone astray,
Oh they tell me of a hearing to make things right,
And they tell me that I've caused you pain.
Oh they tell me I should face some people I've wronged,
And they tell me that I'm trouble and vain,
Oh they tell me I should right the wrong that I've done,
And they tell me I'm the one to blame.

The answer to the story makes the right seem strong,
But truth won't cover all the grief.
And justice won't shelter the harm that's done.
When wicked still prosper from greed.

Let me tell them of the plot that made you strong,
And tell them of the plans that you made,
Let me tell them of the tears you can turn on,
And tell them of your brooding blame.
Let me tell them the disgrace your claim will define,
And tell them of your monetary weight,
Let me tell them of your secret clouded incline,
And tell them of your perilous change.

Let me tell them the source of the face you put on,
And tell them of the God you enjoy,
Let me tell them of the spirit of wealth you love,
And tell them of the world you destroy.
Let me tell them of the righteous dramatist that lies,
And tell them there's famine in waste,
Let me tell them of the war where the innocent demise,
And tell them of the hearts you break.

My father had a daughter and everyone was suprised!

[This message has been edited by cherrypoptart (06-30-2002 06:34 PM).]

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

1 posted 2002-06-30 08:05 PM

Rebecca darling girl this is a strong and outstanding piece of writing, the message you’ve written comes across loud and clear. You have a powerful poetic voice you make yourself heard and that is excellent. Of course what did I expect you are your father’s child.

Wonderful writing well done and write some more please

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

2 posted 2002-06-30 08:08 PM

powerful - poignant - strong stuff to ponder - well written - thanks - Paul

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

3 posted 2002-06-30 10:33 PM

Good write, powerful emotions.
Sandra

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

4 posted 2002-06-30 10:37 PM

This is strongly written with a good flow. I like it.

Nan

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

5 posted 2002-07-01 06:32 AM

I don't know where you get this stuff kid. I hope it's not serious!
Great writing!

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

6 posted 2002-07-01 09:22 AM

WOW!!!
Powerful write, well penned.

~HUGS~
Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2002-07-01 11:05 AM

Cherry

You have a very strong voice and your thoughts run deep...I like that! Enjoyed the poem!

cherrypoptart
Member

since 2002-06-09

Posts 109
state of wordthiness

8 posted 2002-07-01 01:11 PM

Thanks to all who commented on this. I say the same back to all of you!

SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

9 posted 2002-07-02 10:10 AM

Very good write here.

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

10 posted 2002-07-02 10:22 AM

This poem is unconstitutional...didn't you know you can't use "God" in anything these days...It offends atheists and Budda and Allah and all the others that don't count for anything of any value?...Geesch...such a great poem and then ya go and break the law....shame shame....but, as far as I'm concerned it was wonderful...

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

11 posted 2002-07-02 10:43 AM

cherrypoptart
Well I would say you said it all, enjoyed.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

12 posted 2002-07-03 03:31 AM

BOING!

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

13 posted 2002-07-04 10:35 PM

BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, I love the mightiness of your words, sweet friend, I love the whole "Speak For Yourself" feel in this! (big hugggsssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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