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As a Sky Falls
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As a Sky Falls |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA 
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As a Sky Falls it broke a covenant with g*d and fell crashing to earth scattering its white lifeblood in invisible curtseys and last bows. no one noticed no one cared to care when heaven touched the soil and a new congress was made kindled by interlinked coexistence so subtle it was missed by mortal eyes only seasons of withering felt the nuance of the alien invasion of morality. (an oldie from some personal archives from my Picasso days) |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
I was touched by the title..."As a sky falls", and I like the poem too! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Jeff, there is more here than meets the soul.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ShadowRider Certainly something to think about, enjoyed. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! I'm with what Karilea has said, there is so much more and we take it for granted so much but I believe looking up to the heavens and keeping them afloat is what will inspire us further! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Jeff darling boy I think this is utterly utterly spectacular. This a truly outstandingly fabulous poem. Such precision of placement, such a fabulous flow and form. You paint the scene darling heart as only you know how to do. You combined the imagery with your words in perfection. Truly perfect writing, and I love it. Truly you are a master at these poems darling boy, and I love it utterly utterly love it. Phrases as elegant as only you know how to present them flow like a clear stream of liquid light, words placed with the delicacy of a painter.   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
For certain, there are a few golden souls that noticed, standing by with open heart to immortalize the birth of dreams. Bravo. ThisDiamond |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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texasrose Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 146 |
very well said Jeff [This message has been edited by texasrose (06-30-2002 10:06 AM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Jeff, who do you think you are? - Chicken Little. Seriously though I loved the feel of this. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
to be human is to be mortal, and immortality doesn't appeal to me. Spirituality, now that is what it's all about. enjoyed Jeff. [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (06-30-2002 10:11 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
LOL@Kethry! Great piece Jeff..made this reader stop and think. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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cherrypoptart Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 109state of wordthiness |
Very very well done. |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Neeraja, the title in this poem came first, and the thoughts came after easily. You are most kind! Sunshine: don't ya know it?! manna from above can take many forms of disguise, but the thanks should tumble easily from our tongues sooooo Thank you, Sunshine! Sey, Yes, amigo! I often wonder whether I have the done the right thing, and have decided to let my conscience decide all matters of conflict. And, conscience is little more than the heart seed of God. Muchos gracias, amigos. Thanks for your generosity! JkF |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Hi NoahGuy! Hope your weekend was prosperous and peaceful. So many times we dwell in the house of despair even though those days are outnumbered by Happier Days 3 to 1. Thanks are in order for all of us, every day. Blushing ferociously Thank you, Maaaaaaaasha! Here, for once in my life, I think I achieved the brevity in words that represented the enormity of thought I was hoping for. It only happens once in a while, but it's a gas when it works, huh? Thanks sweet friend! TD, I DOOOO love that response! A poetic line worth the weight of my diamonds. Beautifully said! Thankx, Td! Thankx again, y'all! Jeff |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
TexasRose: hmmmm I bet we have met once before. (patting my head thinking) hehe Thank you for indulging my bit of nostalgia here, TR. Hope you have been well….haven't see you much… Kethry: I will have to admit something here. I got the inspiration for writing this after reading a science fiction novel. But the funny thing was, I couldn't concentrate very well because I couldn't strip out this goofy image of Chicken Little! True story….crazy huh? Thankx Keth, and take care, K? Nance! Happy weekend, gal. Que pasa, amiga? I know I know….Kethry cracks me up, too! I laughed out loud and Batman gave me the weirdest look. Thanks Nance, soooo much. CherryPop Tart: your reply is as sweet as your name, and humbles this writer. Thank you! Be well and spread Peace, jeff |
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