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Uluru - Sacred site
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Uluru - Sacred site |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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*Another poet another style, as you can see I am playing at dressing up and let's pretend. Let me know what you think. Round the sacred site Uluru Where the tourists do what they do And they walk the ancient places with their faces all agog With their camera shutters clicking While the scavengers are nicking All the tenets of this holy place sacred to man and dog For the white man in his taming In a place made new by naming Ayer's rock the place of power where the western people go Now a victim of pollution From the white mans fine solution As in solitary splendour this monolith will grow The tourists stand a dreaming With their pockets full of seeming And the wisdom of the ages filters down from up above While the land goes unreplenished Without polish, gloss or finish And the white man says 'cry freedom' while they preach the god of love Yet the ancients in survival Will wait for the revival Of the land that in its anger will return to seal its mark But the tourists gaily singing With their camera straps a swinging Will hustle to the darkness of the towns both drear and stark To their tents at night they're creeping With the dreams of just they're sleeping Wearied by the day and all the things that they have seen For the moon is kindness shining Gleams down upon the finding Of the people dancing boldly in old hope and in old dream Come the eve, the air is wilful While the people patter skilful Dispossessed, the people of the rock will wander sadly by And become tourist attraction Captured by their cameras action But their painted face of gaiety hides beneath a heartfelt sigh They wait in anticipation Till the conscience of a nation Sees them as a people with a right to stand apart Then they'll dance the songs of dreaming There will be no more of screaming As the sacred site recovered takes the people to its heart Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth darling heart sister and holder of the stars delight, firstly excellent poem written with your wonderful and amazingly beautiful skilful touch. And secondly I love this I love it utterly utterly. I want to send the heralds out with a copy of this, have Bards singing this wherever they roam. Couldn’t you see Vanyel, in his young and heedless days, before he became a Herald Mage singing this? He would definitely look like the peacock, and sing this perfectly. Banjo Patterson, eat your heart out, The One and only Kethry Vale has taken your style and made it her own. This is truly exquisite. definitely cue the trumpets this is soooooooooo good This is truly wonderful writing I love it utterly utterly love it    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Oh please don't be so harsh on us eager tourists. i do so want to see your lovely country someday. Joyce |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
One of my first poet friends was from Victoria, Australia also and one of the first things I did besides buy a rhyming dictionary was to buy a book on Australian dialect and translations..but I also researched the territories so I am familiar with the Ayers Rock. This is lovely and heart felt, Keth. a wonderful write hugss M |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
WOW Kethry, what a beautiful poem you wrote. The flow and rhyming are just perfect!!  It's a song, a beautiful song It's always sad when people turn other people into an attraction. (at least I think that's what you were saying here). Geez, me thinks your muse was dancing when you wrote this one. TitiaLike scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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TriXter Member
since 2002-03-20
Posts 112The One |
enjoyed The man of few words... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big huggssssssss) As much as I'd love to visit Ayers Rock someday, it saddens me deeply too to see tourists take the natives who live there just like movie stars or celebrities and disrupt their natural environment! (sad sigh) I find this very sad and I hope that somehow action can be taken to make parts of the park sacred grounds to be respected! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kethry, I saw this just before I left the office tonight, and knew in my heart I wanted to savour it, from the title alone. This style suits you, my girl, and you did a wonderful job with the cadence and rhythm...this practically reaches out and grabs you, and draws you in.... Can you tell how Proud I am of you? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Keth, You are a natural and this was a delight to read. You are a talented writer and I do not pass you by. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Kethry..awesome write! I agree with everything Karilea said. Also, when all the superlatives have been used what can one say? Beautiful...love this style on you! ~Hugs~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kethry You have done the subject and the style so well. I enjoyed every word! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Keth, Respect for both the people and the land...good ideals. But, I have a question. If I ever am able come to visit, what will I get to see? An excellent write and a not simple topice done extremely well. But that is just my opnion.  Show you care to those you love...today. |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Kethry...Seems like all the intelligent comments have been made but I wanted you to know that I read and appreciated your poem. I'm almost to awe-struck to comment. And your subject matter was so good--Damn tourists anyway. Hope they don't leave graffitti. Shenachie |
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BrandeeM Junior Member
since 2002-05-01
Posts 45 |
Beautiful!!! [This message has been edited by BrandeeM (06-29-2002 01:54 AM).] |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I love the message here!!! we could light a candle every night to replinish nature's sight yet still the people gawk and stare destroying beauty, land dripping bare... you are an inspiration as is this piece... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I do hope you continue to write in this style. You nailed the cadence and you covered your bases well in your thoughts. I very much enjoyed this and even came back a second time to read it. I have heard of Ayers Rock, but have to admit that I don't know a whole lot about it, however, I AM going to look it up after reading this. Wonderfully expressed and once again, this style suits your pen quite well. Loved it. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks for all the wonderful responses, for those who don't know I was mimicking the style of AB (Banjo) Patterson and in particular a poem called Clancy of the Overflow, which I can't print here because of copywrite restrictions but who is a fabulous writer to search out. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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andEmmamakes3 Member
since 2002-05-11
Posts 66Kent |
Auntie Keth this is wonderful writing, mum printed out Clancy of the Overflow by Banjo Patterson and you have managed to write his style perfectly. Well written and perfectly expressed I know you know that I prefer rhyme so I was bound, like mum, to enjoy this poem but it really is superb writing well done and it as are all yours a keeper. Excellent writing Emma   Eternity, stands laughing at old time |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kethry~ As stunning a piece as I've seen by you~ You treat the subject with a mastery of knowledge~ 'Yet the ancients in survival Will wait for the revival Of the land that in its anger will return to seal its mark' Weaving the rhyme to bring the story home is not always easy ... you just did it remarkably well~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Keth, remarkable write, I enjoyed it muchly. Pepper |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Hi Keth  wonderful write, beautiful story telling, loved the images..thanks for sharing *smiles* ~hugs~ Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, wow... *S* You have to know I love this style! *S* This is magnificent, Kethry... both the story you tell and the skill in which you tell it. *S* If you're not familiar with Eric Bogle's work, I think you'd like his songs. *S* There's no pretence here, Keth... only excellence. *S* |
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