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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
in responding to a poem of another, I found myself using the phrase: with tandem hearts I think I thought it up myself, but it's possible I read the line in someone's poem. That's the one concern I have about following the advice to read the poetry/prose of others in order to find my voice. My concerns...that 'the voice of others' will be what transpires in my poetry and I'll be sued for plaegerism. Ye gads!!! Anyway, I plan to try to write a poem to that phrase. Also, in reading something speaking of the exterior, that which shows being much different, often, from the interior of a person, it caused be to think about using the Earth's mantle, core and atmosphere in an analogous way to a person's physical appearance, inner beauty, outward persona, i.e. aura if you will. Anyone game for that idea, too? |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
VAS, It sounds interesting, not sure if I have the right idea, but I might like to give that a try! Debbie |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Her appearance is sweet She looks more than naive With a single glance Soft ringlets fall gently Framing an angelic face Cobalt eyes, scarlet lips This angel changes but No one dares look beyond. For this is a mock mask The crust of reality Beyond the surface lies Truth. Her heart is a bitter arctic Never embraced by love The only truth known is Hate. Afraid of her own evil She hides her core sin And her life goes on. Still, the air that surrounds Is foul, somehow tainted The taste fills a room Some way it is impossible For anyone to ignore She is stained. Nonetheless she tries to Camoflauge transgression Still, she does not succeed Her core is present Always. ~Susie ~*~Born to Blossom and Bloom to Perish~*~ |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Her appearance is sweet OOPS ~Susie ~*~Born to Blossom and Bloom to Perish~*~ [This message has been edited by Angel (edited 07-11-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Angel, very well done!! I've not gotten around to trying this one, though I had planned to. I have the word mantle on a page in June's poetry and that's it. You really should post this in Open#15 so others will be more likely to see it. I don't really understand your oops, I couldn't find a mistake related to that line. Am I just too sleepy? |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
VAS, Glad you enjoyed. The oops was a double post. I didn't erase the first line by mistake. I think it was me who was too sleepy. ~Susie ~*~Born to Blossom and Bloom to Perish~*~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Susie, post this in open. V, my muse and I are not talking. Major writer's block. I have two poems begging to be finished but I am at a loss for words. Though I look forward to the results from this challenge. Oh just finished reading Corinne's poem When the river flows upsteam she had a line "they stalk in tandem" could that be where you line sprung from? [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 07-12-2001).] |
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