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Discovering Bliss
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Discovering Bliss |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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OK, challengees...it's time to relate to how YOU discovered bliss. The biggest challenge of all...not to use the most obvious word "KISS" in either rhyme or freestyle! GO FOR IT! ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Mokagrl14 Junior Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 12Cape Coral, Fl, USA |
My bliss,(If I've found it at all at such a young age) has been the understanding that life, in itself, is undefinable. And the trick to overcoming this obstacle, is to be happy with what you have, and the rest is soon to come. Krista :O) |
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Sunshine
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OK, Mokagrl14, now put it in a poem! ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Mokagrl14 Junior Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 12Cape Coral, Fl, USA |
Allrighty! Bliss Life as unpredictable as silence. Any moment, Any glory. Any passion for the unknown. Dream for words as fast as thought. Stay silent, Stay simple. Breathe as powerful as speech. Create a purpose to stay alive. Time is gone, Time is death. Happiness comes with understanding. Admit the undefinable. [This message has been edited by Mokagrl14 (edited 07-16-99).] |
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Sunshine
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Very good. Now, let's hope more follow your lead! |
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Mya15 Junior Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 16Sunrise,Fl,33351 |
okay... this REALLY sucks but here goes  Bliss My first experience With love and bliss Was with the one That I truly miss He showed me a love I've never seen And places in my heart No one's ever been With his love I could touch the sky And because of his love My heart could fly high But we were truly Like noght and day And somewhere along the lines We didn't know what to say The love of my life Was now lost And I tried to get him back At all costs But a voice inside told me "Let him be Because the best things in life Can be loved, if set free" |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mya15, this was good, and the only comment I have is to spell check...see "noght" for "night". Also, break up your stanzas for easier reading [a space inbetween every four lines]. The context was good and the message was clear...and you met the challenge! Congrats! ------------------ © KRJ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Robin Junior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 48Cardiff, Wales, UK |
Bliss 11/8/99 An eruption of passion Releasing the pent up power Of years of tension In an explosion As quiet as the meeting Of lips In a night-filling embrace, A cup overflowing with love and release, That banished the crowded room To another place entirely Years of temptation and denial Months of approach and flight Turned to a brief, Fleeting, Ecstasy At the very moment of final loss. A time when the gate was closing A night when what might have been Was. But for such a short span Before the miseries of the past Crowded in once more To fill me with emptiness. |
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Sunshine
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I like this very much, Robin...and your take on "bliss" was quite dramatic and emotional. Thank you. ------------------ © KRJ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Robin Junior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 48Cardiff, Wales, UK |
Thanks Sunshine, It was not so much an original take, as my only brush with the subject. |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The house is quiet and I am alone just my computer and me My moment of bliss begins when I sit down to write poetry The words flow quickly from my mind leaving a trail of images here line after line, I compose poems of love, of hate and fear. Lovers may come and lovers may go but my poetry stays steadfast and true I hope, Sunshine, this has answered the challenge issued by you. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I like it, I like it! Thanks, PD, for a job well done! ------------------ © KRJ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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startin_fresh Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 137US |
To stare into your lover's eyes And see the soul glow within The feeling of emotion as I lie Feeling the touch of her skin To hold one so close to you Sweat trickling like morning dew Passions heated and then cooled Waking with your love next to you. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Bliss... Is the innocent trust in my baby's eyes as I nurse him at my breast. The softness of his smile as he drifts into slumber on my chest. Bliss... Is the laughter from my oldest son as he watches his favorite movie. His budding sense of humor the way he urges "mama, come see!" Bliss... A bouquet of weeds clutched in a grimy little hand Offered sweetly by Nicky, he's mama's little man. Bliss... Two angels from heaven curled up in your arms, knowing that God trusts you to keep them safe from harm. Bliss... Snuggling in a queen sized bed full of lots of toys A happy family, mama and her boys. Bliss... Philip and Nicholas They're why I wake up every day. They are the air I breathe I love them more than words can say. ************ It doesn't flow, but you get my drift. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
No fair, startin fresh! you posted before me. but i love what you wrote. |
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startin_fresh Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 137US |
Thanks for bringing me here Tara. You knew i needed a place to place my work. Hugs my friend. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Aww, your welcome! When I found this place, I knew it was your new home. ((startin fresh)) |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Such a great challenge was this to write you a poem about bliss. There’s pride that I feel when I say I learn something about me everyday. The words that I write are therapy my soul that’s reflected in poetry. Wounds that are healed with each line will allow me to love "Me"…. In time. Each time I take pen in my hand the pages all tell of my pain. The confessions of a lonely soul it keeps me from going insane. I open my soul up to you and allow you to look deep inside. The pages and lines of my poetry this is one place I can’t hide. So come and I’ll share "Me" with you post here and I’ll feel your pain too. Don’t blink …or you just might miss, that this is the source of my bliss. |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
An excerpt from my poem 'Eden'... and the light in the sky was eternal-- such darkness, yet what joy! I looked at the stars gleaming like the waters, and on the ground I laid, looking upwards at the stellar skies-- black as darkness in the forest, clear as water, aching as memories! |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
Heaven in a rhyme Happiness when the words flow Bliss is poetry |
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Missed_fantasy Junior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 16Mankato, MN, USA |
I met you at a place ordinary, nondescript I saw your eyes and looked on Not catching the significance I met you through your roommate unimportant now through time I felt your smile, returned it Never thought about it twice I ran into you a few times waiting for your roommate, friend We would sit and talk awhile So many times spent shared We got to know each other and I started to notice That while not actively searching I had been discovering bliss. ------------------ Love always and blessed be my children |
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