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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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Ok well...I am inspired by a list of challenges Brad posted in the Eng. forum and I have kind of modified one...lol. My challenge is to write an autobiographical poem using the pronoun 'I' only once and you can't wrote 'my' or 'me' or anything like that... heheeee - there are certain people who right now will be wanting to strangle me but oh well!  K |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am Sunshine a guiding light fully bright to reunite all to right a force within not without sin giving laughs and grins here, where it all begins a common one and can be undone a heart and soul to be won underneath all, full of fun Sunshine have been naive have fully grieved have never disbelieved In God have been relieved... Sunshine have faith in angels have been through squalls haven't seen it all but heard Ron's call that's moi. [Already Laughing at your reaction...you didn't say we couldn't use "I, me or my" in languages other than English...so, I probably fudged under your guidelines, but it was fun to write, nevertheless...] Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Grrrrrrrrr at you Sunshine!! HAHA...it is lovely and thankyou! You encompassed a lot - wow. I suppose I ought to post mine too...LOL. ******* Fortress Curbed these lights against the blue-dusked sky can it be imagined the night of a city dark-cozened only a star could gleam there and that without the clouds no foot could fall without a breach of balance whisper-heavy curls of air sadden unbrightened for a city unlit is lone and hangs a pall of silence there around I am your fortress darkened |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Well done both of you!!! You are just to smart for me today... LOL I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Well I am never one to turn down a challenge, so please do not challenge me to a duel to the death. here is my attempt. ================================ mass of contradictions A word spoken softly muted to the noise of outside, the choruses of insanity, drown out the beauty of communication that can only breathe in whispers of poetry. A tenderness yet to be shared, Open arms are empty, in want of someone to reside permanently, to fill the emptiness of a loving heart, to climb desire's columns. A darkness, that stares into the abyss pushing forward the filthy secrets of the soul, the candle in the shadows the cry venomous to hypocrisy, with vision locked in obsessive analysis that seek the flaws of even angels. The clown, with wide Cheshire cat grin The fool that could not care less, The words withheld by others are celebrated and broad cast from this honest mouth. A body of subdued beauty held on the inside, of dreams and thoughts that by countless others will never be seen,not to be pigeonholed a mass of contradictions……all this I am. < !signature--> ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 05-27-2000).] |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Wow you guys - sure write well. I just play around - and decided to use Brian's ploy, though not as good as his, it gets the point across  Who is that Woman What devilish imp is this what trouble will she be in next can't anyone get her to shut up why does she cry over silly shows and can't keep the same husband, you know she has three wonderful sons growed why did she have such an awful childhood why does she talk about God as if he doesn't exist who is this naughty girl - does she have no respect Who is this woman who is sassy and bold nothing daunt's her flamboyant style Who will be her next beau for awhile that poor fellow won't know what hit him when she decides to become feminine or is she tug boat annie in disguise? Got to tell you she can be very serious wonder how many personalities dwell inside who is this woman who can be mysterious Who is that woman who has grown wise she reads, writes, dreams, works and plays Bet you figured it out, that woman is I ~netswan |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW You've all met your challenge well... Excellent guys! Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kamla~ Well, I've had a go at it, Chickie ! Hope you enjoy ! LOVE YOU ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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eMoTiOnS oVerLoAd Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 10 |
i think i'll give this one a try...here it goes~~~~> a mere reflection in a mirror, wondering what she has become, wondering what she could be. how did her life bring her to her knees, in search of what she once was. light hearted, not a worry, not a tear shed. realizing how much time had passed, amazed at how she looked so young, yet felt so old, she had not a worry. tears fell rapidly, blurring her vision, cursing all the stars, cursing what her life has become, screaming in agony... wishing she would be free from this torment..... as a tear escapes... "I" stand and watch my faith escape with it. ***tell me what you guys think...criticism is GOOD!!! HEHE veronika |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Isis...hey - thankyou! Brian - I think your poem is just gorgeous...because I can totally relate - I often admit to myself that I am a mass of contradictions. Netswan - I just adore your honesty here! LOL. Cool poem...DA - and so did you dear. Marge(y) Veronika - first off I must say: WELCOME to the family  Glad you could join us. I think this poem is great - it is honest, tender and has some excellent language usage. You know - if you love criticism you will probably love the Critical Analysis forum - they are reputed to bite there (hehe) but in actual fact don't! Thanks for your participation in this! K |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ok...here we go! With winking eyes The poet sees Life like all her poetrys And in the thought 'tween rhyme and reason she feels the blade of poetic treason Seeking not who but why life’s meaning clear before she must die time stands still in words of verse life could be better could be no worse |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Madam Devine...Wow...gorgeous...sigh. and in the thought 'tween rhyme and reason she feels the blade of poetic treason Wonderful lines... I have but one question - where is your 'I'? K |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
There is no 'i' in poetry!~ LOL |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Julio Iglesias was told by all to give a song a try The only rule thay said was he could only use one "AIIYE". "That's silly", said the singer. "Aiiye, aiiye, aiiye is what we sing! Who in the world would even try for such a foolish thing???" The captain told the sailor "Swab the deck, you lazy fool!!" The sailor snapped "Aye, aye sir!" Captain screamed, "You broke the rule!!! That New Zealand gal who's being cute says we can only use one Aye!" The sailor trembled as he spoke. "er, aye" was his reply. So here I sit on mountain top...the ruler of my land. Inhabitants all worship me for they now understand That, thanks to the Severny one, although they don't know why, Their cyclops is the only thing that's fit to have one eye! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sharon - I may or may not let you get away with that one...heheheeeeee...grrrrrrr! And as for you YOUNG man... ROTFLMAO!!!!!!! ~PEALS OF RAUCOUS LAUGHTER!~ You're too much 'deer...you're just too much... Going off to laugh until I cry... K |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
well, severn, you have caught me on the wrong foot... gimme a bit of time and I will post my response, is posting on #7 good or should I post it specifically here??? Well, let me start moving now, and write something.... regards, sudhir Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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monique Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 369Louisiana |
Hi! Hi! don't think hi! could not, not say hi! in a poem more ten once but hi! enjoy reading your poemz hi! love hit can hi! just be a looker a poem taster a poem lover even though hi! cannot compose but sthill want to say someting all hi! want is for people to be happy and some just love to cause trouble why does a god would create a world like that there is no love in suffering are we déjà in hell and hi! i am just passing by for eternity monique |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sudhir - hey there! Post it wherever you choose! Can you please e-mail me the link if you post it in Open (severn6@hotmail.com) though because I may miss it. Can't wait to see! Monique - HAHA...how evasive of you! Hi agree and hi should say you have done miHIgty well... K |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
posted it severn, and sending you a mail too... let me know what you think about it... called "the sketch-maker" in Open #7 really vague writing, I must admit... regards, sudhir |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
A mixture of so many things. Which of them shall here be told? A little tentative and shy with a strong desire to be bold. A tender hearted woman with a facade of being strong. A fierce independance battling against a secret urge to just belong. A dreamer, sure enough, but there is so much more. A believer that there are still a few things left worth dying for. A whole host of opposites inside this body reside. And if you still know nothing of the poet, You must at least admit I tried. |
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