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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I am blocked and I can't get up!!! Please throw some phrases at me so I can stimulate my 'writing' lobe in my brain....no more than 10 words..no less than 4..please!!! I promise to deliver the finished poem within 48 hours... Thank you! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Poet deVine, How about: "The grass looks greener on the other side" "Gentle breeze flows, ever so still is the silence, blinking at the eye of the storm" and a poetess finds remedy to a block... If I had been any help, I will be honoured... I will think up more, but what themes do you prefer? On second thinking, what I am doing? Me having the guts to suggest the poetess words to write about !!!! Anyway, lots of regards, sudhir. |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Hmm Poet...here are a couple The Soul sank with the setting sun Clouds overtook the Bright Soul Dancing Souls under the shining moon Hmm...maybe those will help...I hope that they do.. daniel |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Hey deVine, try these. . . Where the heart is. . . His heart I have carried. . . Fly gentle spirit. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
Yearning light.... Breaking dawn.... Shadow stilled.... Withered, begone.... Harking song.... ^_^ LadySofia "To the innocent and ancient ones, the sparks which light our fires." Amanda Piatt |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I know how it is... months with nothing and then one phrase, one image starts you off again, saves you writer's block. Well here are a few off the top my head.. words broken and unending eyes of glass turn winter pale, bleached skin fawning in frozen snow, virgins in a devil's dance. a youth perspective twisted to elder vantage -------------------- none of these can even compare to the images you create in your poems, |
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Poet deVine
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Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Christopher gave me the first line of this poem.... Whils't gentle winds surround my thoughts Silence bears my witness here Hearing not of what I see Nor seeing naught of what I hear Trembling hands foretell my fear Hesitation my friend in time First steps taken up to last I begin another rhyme Fair are the friends who offer To ease this poet’s plight Shadows chased from muse ablock’d I step into the light. [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 05-20-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you Sudhir! Ever so still is the silence Blinking at the eye of the storm Earth’s gentle breeze flows Keeping here mantle warm Mother Nature’s tears flow Raining sadness upon the land Angry lightening hurled From passionate Mother’s hand Ill-used gift, mocking Mother’s heart Graffiti written upon the wind Days pass quickly, all will be lost As some never know they sinned. |
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Poet deVine
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Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you Daniel!!! Your words inspired a new chapter to my 'Immortal Woman' series... Immortal child, her name is Soul Delights in learning the game The sword becomes her favorite toy She wields it without shame Twelve years old, a youngling She wandered from the Immortal camp Lost and bewildered Alone, cold and damp The Soul sank with the setting sun To rest upon fallen leaves Not knowing that her recklessness Is why her mother grieves Morning clouds overtook the bright Soul The Sun protected her from life’s harms Immortal clan enfolded her Held her fast in sisterly arms Dancing Souls under the shining moon Safe from mortal sins of man The band of sisters, so few now Surviving as best they can. |
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Poet deVine
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Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sven!!! Thank you... Where the heart is cliché’s phrase I seek it still with him there Hidden behind the façade of friend In expressions to tender to share His heart I have carried within my own Little does he know it, I fear Fly gentle spirit, words of love From my heart to my lover’s ear. |
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Poet deVine
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Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Brian, thank you..a bit of freedom with your words.... eyes of glass turn winter pale, death takes this last advantage words broken and unending youth perspective twisted to elder vantage as bleached skin fawning in frozen snow we are virgins in a devil's dance fate laughs at our foolish desire as we seek to find a romance. Thank you my friends..I'm afraid they are not as good as your words would require..but I decided to write them one after another...25 minutes....I apologize. [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 05-20-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW poet deVine, you certainly got rid of that writer's block. All brilliant poems, each one should be posted in open forum 7. wonderful stuff. |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Ok I've always tried to make a poem outt of this line and I never could maybe you can. Ok here it is: When the moon touches the stars, And the stars sparkle enternally.... We are all poets, its just some people dont know it yet. |
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Poet deVine
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Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Maria!!! (Did I ever tell you I'm glad to see you here!?) Thank you for the phrase.. They stood before their families No longer children in their hearts Both vowing to love each other Both seeking life’s fresh starts Her pain; a shadow of what it was His anger, flown away in delight Hands joined, smiles reflecting The passion that begins tonight “When the moon touches the stars, And the stars sparkle eternally Til God called them home they vowed To love each other faithfully |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
How bout this, it's what just popped in my mind... If I had a YUGO When I looked into your eyes I saw |
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Poet deVine
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Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Becky, here is number one...thanks! If I had a YUGO My life would be complete It would satisfy my desire Driving it would be so sweet My wife tells me I’m crazy My mother-in-law just glares But if I want to drive one It doesn’t matter if anyone cares I wear my lime green leisure suit With my shirt of darkest peach With my Raybans, I’m a king I'm outside mere mortals reach So when the wife is yelling Tom, Dick, Harry, Bob or Hugo Life can be much sweeter If you only had a Yugo [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 05-20-2000).] |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
For someone who had been blocked you sure unclogged alright! You've written some great stuff here Sharon! LOL @ Yugo! I don't know why that popped in the brain but it did. I love each one of them  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Okay, I heard this one yesterday... The Vacuum Of Your Mind.... or In You I See.... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wow, deVine. . . I guess you weren't as blocked as you thought you were!! These were great, you did well with all of them. . . and thank you for using my phrases and turning them into gold. . . Well spun my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
endless nights greyish skies in the hush of silence hearts entwine their souls beseige essence of purities ... [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 05-22-2000).] |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Nice work with the poem though glad to see those two line gone to good use We are all poets, its just some people dont know it yet. |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
try this one on for size, never could get very far with it. My desolate heart lies bleeding P. J. Kotrch carpe diem A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Poet DeVine, Your talents are endless. You met each challenge perfectly. When something is this good, how does one not post a comment?? Marcy |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
It doesn't look like you need any help,Sharon, --but it is a challenge to me to come up with some suggestive phrases for you Here are some poem fodder phrases: "Such are promises I'll ne'er make" and in a similar vein: "Oh the regrets I've ne'er had to face..." on the lighter side... "I want to be a country bumpkin..." or "As your First Lady President, here's what I plan to do..." (sorry I overran the words on this one- but I think it would be interesting!) David |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Sharon, I just stopped in to see what this was all about. WOW - what a masterful poet you are. I shall not give you any phrases your writer's block has disappeared. PS when I get the block I pick three letters from the alphabet and make myself write down the first word that comes to my head for each of those three letters ------- I have picked some very strange words --) AND I must use those words in the poem. r rat a attitude c crab those were the letters and words that popped in my head. AND what a challenge? Beautiful poetry, Sharon ~netswan |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
As it whispers to the mysteries of the depth of my mind I'm not sure what you could do with this PD, it just came to mind!! Change it around too if need be!! Bridgette |
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pyro Junior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 12 |
hi poet de vine...and what a divne poet you are!!! you have a wonderfull imigination(wish i could spell) anyway i have posted a topic under yours about my best freind mirabelle and i am sure you will find it rather challenging and at the same time you will be helping me so please PLEASE PLEASE write on this subject i believe it is under something like please help!!! it is really important to me.. or something like that thank you ever so much pyro |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Jogging the block of my muse.  |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Wow Sharon! You are so goodto be able to write something that quick on so many different topics. |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
The only way to increase the trade in value of a Yugo is to fill it's gas tank.LOL paladin |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Love's reply rests in your eyes love's call rides the wind Woman calls her man with her eyes Now I'm inspired |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Shaking head, wondering why The world has gone suddenly mad TV blares another riot ensues A child killed, another family sad To turn away seems only right What you don’t see won’t cause you harm But if you don’t look, who will testify Who will ring out sanity’s alarm? Hate has become the word of the day Questions spewed, expecting venom’s lies Just smile, in faith, and answer not Love's reply rests in your eyes ** thanks Interloper! |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
He left her in the darkened forest And bid her to wait for his return Days passed and she waited still His heart she vowed to earn He promised that he’d come to her Leaving wealth and wife behind One last kiss he gave to her Sought her heart with his to bind A whistle was the signal She strained to hear it in the trees But alas, there was only silence In the passing summer breeze She lived on there for many years listening for sounds of her paramour Til one day, she lay down one last time love's call rides the wind no more *** Did I say thanks Interloper? |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
It's amazin' t' watch you burn out words, Sharon. Inspirin'! And I found another part of yr immortal woman series. She said burn ... together. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Oops! (nevermind -- ah thought th' above reply hadn't gone through ...) She said burn ... together. -TON [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-23-2002 01:55 PM).] |
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