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dhuron
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0 posted 2000-03-27 09:54 PM


OK, the world is filled with people with fears. My challenge to you all:

Pick a Phobia..any will do and write a poem through the eyes of a person with that Phobia..but it is to be written in pantoum format.*hee hee* Good Luck. Below is an example of a Pantoum Poem

here are a couple

murophobia: afraid of mice
necrophobia: afraid of death




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wonderous
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1 posted 2000-03-28 09:33 AM


question-what is the  pantoum format?
dhuron
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2 posted 2000-03-28 01:04 PM


The best way I can tell you is to give you an example of a pantoum:

I see them, the ten warriors
they are here to protect
Neptune, Mars, Pluto, Jupiter, Saturn
Warriors of beauty, fighting for life.

They are here to protect
Celestial Fire Burn, Supreme Thunder Crash, Deep Submerge
Warriors of beauty, fighting for life.
Double Moon, Mercury, Uranus, Venus.

Celestial Fire Burn, Supreme Thunder Crash,Deep Submerge
They are over-powered, by the enemy
Double Moon, Mercruy, Uranus, Venus
The wariors of peace are losing

They are over-powered, by the enemy
Circle of Sailor Power!
The warriors of peace are losing
Mars Star Power, Neptune Star Power, Moon Crystal Power

Circle of Sailor Power!
Purity of Light
Mars Star Power, Neptune Star Power, Moon Crystal Power
Beauty and love triumph.

Purity of Light
Neptune,Mars,Pluto,Jupiter,Saturn
Beauty and Love triumph
I see them, the ten warriors


that is a pantoum I did for my creative writing class. It is a poem with stanzas of four lines.  The Second and Fourth lines of the first stanza become the First and Third Stanza of your Second Stanza and so one till you get to the Final Stanza.



wonderous
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3 posted 2000-03-28 04:04 PM


great poem

whew thats a toughie shall give it a try

Isis
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4 posted 2000-03-28 05:38 PM


Daniel, I'm so embarrassed, you asked me for advice, and you know more about poetry than I, the facts are so obvious within this challenge, I should be going to you for pointers.  
I don't even know why you asked me...... hon you are more than fine on your own, believe me!!

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



wonderous
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5 posted 2000-03-28 05:59 PM


that was harder than i thought
okey dokey here goes its about Phasmophobia -the fear of ghosts
its not the best by then its my first pantoum or whatever its called

Night darker than the blackest soul
Stars icy spears aimed at my heart
Clouds whirling violently,stormy waves
Moon beams silhouette dancing figures

Stars icy spears aimed at my heart
An eiery whisper, a clinking sound
Moon beams silhouette dancing figures
The worst about to befall

An eiery whisper, a clinking sound
Shadows from all around merge
The worst about to befall
Winds blow, leaves rustle

Shadows from all around merge
Drums roll, a demonic dance
Winds blow, leaves rustle
The mind crumbles


Drums roll, a demonic dance
Clouds whirling violently,stormy waves
The mind crumbles
Night darker than the blackest soul




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dhuron
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6 posted 2000-03-28 06:12 PM


Wonderous, That was excellent for your first time:

Night darker than the blackest soul
Stars icy spears aimed at my heart
Clouds whirling violently,stormy waves
Moon beams silhouette dancing figures

Stars icy spears aimed at my heart
An eiery whisper, a clinking sound
Moon beams silhouette dancing figures
The worst about to befall

An eiery whisper, a clinking sound
Shadows from all around merge
The worst about to befall
Winds blow, leaves rustle

Shadows from all around merge
Drums roll, a demonic dance
Winds blow, leaves rustle
The mind crumbles


but to finish off the pantoum you need a final stanza to close it all off like this

~ Drums roll, a demonic dance
  Clouds whirling violently,stormy waves
  The mind crumbles
  Night darker than the blackest soul
~

and that is how to end the pantoum, one of my favorite types of poems. It is easy and it flows really well, and the Key, you don't have to rhyme LOL.  I am really bad at trying to rhyme.


 The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship."

--Ralph Waldo Emerson


wonderous
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7 posted 2000-03-28 07:07 PM


Thanxs for the closure
i,m terrible at rhyming too

but that was a fun experience


dhuron
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8 posted 2000-03-28 07:11 PM


No Problem,

Perhaps you'll use this form another time. I just love it.


Take Care
Daniel

 The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship."

--Ralph Waldo Emerson


StarrGazer
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9 posted 2000-03-29 02:47 PM


I'm afraid to sleep
The nightmares will come
Scared I'll let the darkness in
Tortured by memories

The nightmares will come
Always there haunting me
Tortured by memories
What if I shut my eyes too tight ?

Always there haunting me
Scared I'll let the darkness in
What if I shut my eyes too tight ?
I'm afraid to sleep



 "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning"
~Randal Jarrell~



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