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Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2002-04-25 07:53 AM

Sitting in the dim,
Watching pale skin bodies
While drinking dark amber beers,
As the rock beat pounds some similar song.
Trying not to think,
Or feel,
Or even to be,
As the stack of dollars slowly disappears,
They know this isn’t somewhere I belong,
But this a place of not caring.
The barmaid carefully shows cleavage as she brings another
And another, and another;
And she insist I place a dollar in her treasure chest;
I receive an almost complete smile for the effort.
Closing time finds me with less paper
And just as many thoughts
That I wished were washed away,
But weren’t.
I stop at the gas station across the street,
Where you pump your own,
Unknown hookers give me the eye
They seem glazed and lost,
But unappealing,
Except for the oblivion in their eyes.
I drive off searching for some of my own,
A place where nothingness is felt.

Gloom

amusemi
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray

1 posted 2002-04-25 10:45 AM

There are so many in this world looking for love, looking for escape and searching for a place in life. Sometimes this journey leads us down very dark paths. Very perceptive write!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2002-04-25 12:56 PM

I felt this one and know what it's like to be in limbo..feeling nothingness..and I am not so sure that it is a place to be...unless temporarily.

hugsss
M

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

3 posted 2002-04-25 02:22 PM

Be safe my friend....
Don't get lost
~~ Connie ~~

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2002-04-25 02:28 PM

I know that limbo lost feeling....you write it well.

Like a red brick,
in a white wall
somebodies brush
forgot to paint...
lonely....(as sung by Tracy Lawrence..)

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2002-04-25 05:06 PM

funny how much money oblivion can cost.

smiles and hugs, lovie. I know.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2002-04-25 06:30 PM

no meaning beyond money and sex...
it's what it's all about, I guess...

sad, very sad

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

7 posted 2002-04-25 10:56 PM

Thank you, Amusemi,
Not love, but an escape,
A place to be not,
And yes the path does go some dark places,
Glad you enjoyed.

Thank you, Nakdthoughts,
Everything last for just a while,
Somewhere between a nanosecond and eternity,
I’d like to find a place where time passes without me.
Pleased this struck a feeling with you.

Thank you, Zinsser,
Don’t worry, I always leave a trail of black pebbles,
To find my way back.

Thank you, Gentle Spirit,
It pleases me to strike a memory with you,
If only with humble words of limbo living.

Thank you, Serenity,
I never count my money at the bar,
The stack is just a way to know when to go,
Sometimes getting there is cheep,
But stay there is expensive.

Thank you, passing shadows,
I never put much meaning to money,
And have not enough experience in the other,
But this wasn’t about either,
Anymore than a killing is about the bullet or knife,
Perhaps I missed the meaning with you,
Pleased you took the time to read and respond.

Gloom

Soleil Noir
Senior Member

since 2001-12-19

Posts 688
USA

8 posted 2002-04-26 10:17 AM

A thought escaped
along with the dollars
until the mind
was as empty
as the hand

and may I add only two cents
in two syllables...

Bravo

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2002-04-26 10:31 AM

Professor Gloom
Your writing is excellent but your wish will take it away.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

10 posted 2002-04-26 10:37 AM

sometimes in life we find
that there are memories
made to remember and cherish
while unfortanetly others
bring with them a certain
sullen kind of sadness...

enjoyed your trip into oblivion

Like a red brick,
in a white wall
somebodies brush
forgot to paint...
lonely....(as sung by Tracy Lawrence..)

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

11 posted 2002-04-26 10:43 AM

oblivion is quite costly then..think I'll stay out in the open...I like the seperation put into verse

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

12 posted 2002-04-26 10:52 AM

The barmaid carefully shows cleavage as she brings another
And another, and another;
And she insist I place a dollar in her treasure chest;
I receive an almost complete smile for the effort
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Great imagery here Gloom.
Try not to stay in oblivion for long.
Excellent write.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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