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I Love Him |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
I love him in words I cannot say. These eyes do not deny This thought I feel inside. He shall never know The deepness of this need Or the sacred Untold ache of my plea To winds that Enrapture us both. The morn awakes To thoughts Of unspoken haunting. And I breathe To see him Simply in the space Across the room. I know him In ways He'll never know. And dream of The rapture In unfelt kisses Upon lips Denied. Just believe... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This is a very passionate and yearning poem....Very well done... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes a kiss can open or close a door...James |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) This is soooooo beautifully passionate, sweet friend, your wonderful words always light these pages with loves beauty and yearning! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (04-25-2002 08:37 AM).] |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Amusemi, Is that the way it has to be? How sad for you both.  [This message has been edited by Larry C (04-25-2002 09:26 AM).] |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Magnus-Thank you for the kudos, sweet poet. James-I completely agree with you! MistletoeAngel-I probably sound like a broken record, but thank you for your gentle and loving support. It means so very much. LarryC-I don't know the answer to that question, I just know I am not usually lucky in love. Besides, I am a bit old fashiioned and expect a guy to to make the moves. I am not where I need to be for that to come into my life...although I am working on the things I can change. Thank you for reading and caring. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He shall never know The deepness of this need Or the sacred Untold ache of my plea To winds that Enrapture us both. The morn awakes To thoughts Of unspoken haunting. And I breathe To see him ========================== the ache and longing in this is touchable...it rises off the page... intense and honest writing poetess amusemi. the phrasing you chose, added to this bittersweet write's haunting quality. very well done .. its great to see you posting again. take care, jm Now for me some words come easy |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
I am sad to hear about your unluckiness in love ~ your words display a heart that is true and loving ~ his loss. Enjoyed! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh, your words make my heart ache. Well written piece of work. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
so much ache and longing in this, and so well expressed. enjoyed...*s* Like a red brick, |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I like the twist at the end -- all too true. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
How are you?Disappointment in romance well expressed here, I wonder if you considered another form, like unifyingyour thoughts on the same line?..just a suggestion |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
amusemi Well done, love in the mind is hard to describe. Enjoyed |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'And I breathe To see him Simply in the space Across the room.' Excellent poem, amusemi...the words just jump right off the page here...this is truly a moving write... sp    I've been down this road forever, |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Cat *big smile for ya * wonder where in the flying poetic heck you have been!~ What a triumphant return with the words that only a true lover may say: That you know them better than they know themselves. This is the hallmark of a great relationship! Be cool, give hugs generously, and keep writing these words of wonder! jeff |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
So moving the exceptional insight of this relationship. All good wishes to you. ThisDiamond |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Janet Marie-I guess sometimes fantasy feels almost tangible. Thanks for the w/b. I have missed everyone, but needed a time out. LOL Opeth-Thank you for the compliment. I like the thought that being alone is only a place to begin. Nightshade-I am flattered by the empathy, thank you. By the way I adore your signature.Gentle Spirit-Thank you for reading. You are indeed a GS. bsquirrel-I like your work and am glad to meet you. Thank you. ecrivan-(((ec))) I am well. I do believe you are right about the form. It would certainly make it flow much nicer. I will certainly try to remember the wisdom in the suggestion when I proof the next one. Merci! Seymour Tabin-Boy, that is the understatement of the year...LOL...figuring out the mind means job security for the poet! snowpants-As a huge fan of your pieces, I am very honored by the compliment. ShadowRider-"where in the flying poetic heck have (I) been?"~Well, just listenin' to the band pearls b4 swine (no relation to the poet here, I don't think!)and fallin' in love with my muse all over again! About that relationship thing...it's not a relationship...just wishful thinkin'!!! ThisDiamond-Oh, I am glad to see you again. Good wishes to you, too! |
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