Waiting Room (dark the way I like it) grins

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Open Poetry #20

Waiting Room (dark the way I like it) grins

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2002-04-22 08:07 PM

22 April 02

Philosphy major
Child of the stars
Pours a glass of milk
Over her scars
Cat's meow
Licking insatiable wounds
Telephone conversation
Frequency raping
Her bruises
He laughs
At her sharp tongue
She laps up
His wit
Her heart
A shrinking violet
Determined to flirt
With the thoughts
Of him never calling her back
But really doesn't surprise her
When it's his voice
She hears calling her
In the middle of the
Dark waiting room of her soul
But he'll just have to wait
Till it's his turn
To have his number called...

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (04-22-2002 08:08 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-04-22 08:28 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Kristen, this is so very sad, sweet friend, I hope everything is alright! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, my heart goes out to everyone who feels this way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kristen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

2 posted 2002-05-17 01:14 PM

I hope you are ok. Hoping things get better for you soon.

Dawn

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

3 posted 2002-05-17 01:17 PM

I really enjoyed this. Th' only thing I can caution y' against is using "raping" in a poem. It's a word as strong as a certain word that gets bleeped out when y' type it in. It kinda threw me out of the poem for a moment. But much support and love t' ya anyway. Yr a good writer.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2002-05-17 01:44 PM

I can't say I got what you were saying. I will say I think I got some of it, at least.
I agree that "raping" kinda made my mind hiccup and ruined what flow I had with your work

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