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Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2002-04-23 01:07 AM

Disconnected

Labyrinth of life
subjected to the stale,
entombed of worthless voice
neglected in the wail.
Alive among the dead
on the edge of break
through the maze of lies,
endless pit of ache.

Chesire grin to fade,
nothing left to give,
erase the waste of time
disconnect the live.
Bleed to seep the tears,
disconnect the real
cut the cord of womb,
disconnect the feel.
Suffocate the breath
disconnect the phone,
eradicate the heart,
turn my eyes to stone.

By Melissa P. Monette

[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (04-23-2002 12:51 PM).]

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

1 posted 2002-04-23 01:10 AM

Melissa,
Not so quick there Missy. We aren't through with you yet! What were you thinking?

It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-04-23 04:50 PM

"Chesire grin to fade,
nothing left to give,
erase the waste of time
disconnect the live."

(big hugggsssssss) Oh melissa, this is so very sad, I hope these thoughts are not your own, for never say that, for you have a very loving and giving heart and you are so very special to us all and I know with all the love you give you will find so much love in return! (kiss on cheek) Never give up, sweet friend, we always have your back, God Bless You, we all love you so mcuh! You have such a beautiufl heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2002-04-23 04:53 PM

yes. . . this is exactly the feeling. . .

you show it well here my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2002-04-23 05:02 PM

Melissa,
Love or hate, you say it great. Well done. Sy

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2002-04-23 06:52 PM

Chesire grin to fade,
nothing left to give,
erase the waste of time
disconnect the live.
Bleed to seep the tears,
disconnect the real
cut the cord of womb,
disconnect the feel.
Suffocate the breath
disconnect the phone,
eradicate the heart,
turn my eyes to stone.
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The brevity of verbiage and the crytpic POE-like lines, dark mood & images made this a powerful and impressive write....
I like this style from you..it suits your melacholy muse very well...
but for me personally it was the dead on cadence and meter that impressed and held me...this MUST be read aloud to fully appreciate its gifts.
Very very well done Melissa...your muse is stretching and reaching..growing with every write.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2002-04-23 10:52 PM

Dang it all - Janet Marie took the words right out of my mouth she did! I am kidding of course, but did you ever capture the feeling of that moment well Melissa, as I have been there. Well done.

~* Sharon *~

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