Open Poetry #20 |
Smoking themes |
paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
First time Wet and cold hiking Scouts huddled under a bridge The harsh smoke chokes me Cruisin' Rolled up in my sleeve A pack of unfiltered Camels Symbol of defiance Parking lot Crouched between the cars Hidding from the teacher's eyes Grabbing a quick smoke Sex In the after glow Pulling in the smokes delight Two lights in the dark Nam Different smoke here Tightly rolled and twisted ends Short trips from the war Quitting Last pack in the trash Withdrawal provokes hunger Damn!I almost quit My pipe More than just a smoke Distraction from the boredom Deadly pacifier paladin |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paladin darling boy this is sooooooooo incredibly wonderful. I am never disappointed by the artistry and wonder you craft into your poems and this is amazing, the flow is just perfect. Perfect poetry, and wonderful title Truly sensational writing, you never disappoint me, fabulous Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Hey, paladin, good topic this, and well done. So, can I borrow one? Actually I don't want to borrow one, I'm going to steal your idea and go scribble on another blue page! A parallel tale, so to speak. Thanks! Kraw' "As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
I like to think of my short themes are seeds for longer poems.I look forward to see what grows from the seed you plant. paladin |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
paladin - enjoyed this write. was always attracted to that "bad boy" with the smokes tucked up his t-shirt sleeve....arms tanned and expertly working that wrench on his Harley....oh! excuse me...drifted off there for a moment. lol. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hey Paladin, I'll borrow a figurative smoke here, myself The style gives me food for thought too! Well done |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I am grinning and chuckling....tooo much truth here...like how you did this... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Cool write here Bob. Love this style from you. ~Hugs~ *Nancy just recalled she used to smoke Kools in the U.S. when she lived there...and smoked* ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
Thanks for all the kind words.I need more ideas for other themes.Challenge me. paladin |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You are smokin now, Paladin. Good poem, lots of truth, a candid smoker's confession. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I liked this, paladin... excellent portrait of a life through one habit's evolution. *S* |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
hey man.. as a fellow smoker i can share these feelings you have.. this has proved many fond memories of trying to steal a smoke in the parking lot. good one God alone is alone. Man is not. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Whenever someone mentions Camels I am reminded of my Father dying at a very young age in part due to his habit of chain smoking camels...fortunately I did not pick up his habit although I have smoked for brief periods at various times in my life...James |
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