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jellybeans
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0 posted 2002-04-08 02:23 PM


Stress factors seriously rend
the stronghold, a day long fight
barely maintains equilibrium.
Too close to the edge of sanity
it has before been pushed
and too tightly it has held on
to keep from going over on the edge
of self control.

The orb rolls over the multi dimensional fabric
up down back forth and over again
it cannot stop
its attempts to orbit the middle
to hide near the pretense of normal.

But then
this…lacerated middle
with edges that no longer
withstand
this  is more
than cohesion can counter.

Repair attempts bleed futility
Help is more than
necessary…

The hand offered lifts the oppression
together hovering
above trembling - territory
never before traversed - to let go
is to sink.

© Copyright 2002 jellybeans - All Rights Reserved
suthern
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1 posted 2002-04-08 02:34 PM


The hand offered lifts the oppression
together hovering
above trembling - territory
never before traversed - to let go
is to sink.

Then hold on tightly, dear friend... to one who will not let you sink. *S* Just because the territory is unfamiliar doesn't mean it shouldn't become second nature to you... after you've tippytoed across the seas, you may even find yourself in flight. *S*

jellybeans
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2 posted 2002-04-08 02:39 PM


thank you lady, you always know just how to read me, on another board which I am not blocked from due to our friendly internet police, I got a comment of eerie..and you know me, I wondered if I missed the mark with this, but when I read your comments, I know I got it right
and yeppers, am hoping that the next step after hovering is soaring

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2002-04-08 05:21 PM


Interesting...James
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4 posted 2002-04-08 09:40 PM


I always knew Suthern could speak jellybean...and so can I. Loud and clear, dear lady...Hang on and don't let go...
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5 posted 2002-04-08 09:55 PM




(sigh) Always hang on to those who trust never to let you go, sweet friend, this is a wonderful poem of the search for faith! (big huggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

jellybeans
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6 posted 2002-04-09 02:08 PM


james, not sure if that is good or bad, but would rather be interesting than not *grin*

bal, yeppers I know you can...sometimes my poems are rather personal, and so I hide them behind metaphors and poetic license, but those who know me...read 'me'...thank you

noah.....thank you for your kind hug and wishes

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