Open Poetry #20 |
Eternal Rhyme |
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ternal Rhyme I‘d love to write a sempiternal rhyme To stay with the terms of changing time To brae on the way of eternals rounds And carry its weight on the life of sounds. To stay in the passion and minds of all To echo a wake like a roosters call Regenerate each generations tongue Like the soundings of the bells that are rung A rhyming rhyme that is to play a mime To ply and to fly with the fleeting time To pass through the air in winsome fair To play and to stay the echoes of air It must be pleasing soothing to the ring Like echoes of the birds in spring that sing Like passions butter that enwraps the heart The wave of a flag on a poles rampart Something delicate as the mornings dew Like the whisper of lovers I love you. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (04-08-2002 08:20 AM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'd love to write a sempiternal rhyme To stay with the terms of changing time To brae on the way of eternals rounds And carry its weight on the life of sounds. To stay in the passion and minds of all To echo a wake like a roosters call Regenerate each generations tongue Like the soundings of the bells that are rung A rhyming rhyme that is to play a mime To ply and to fly with the fleeting time To pass through the air in winsome fair To play and to stay the echoes of air ======================================== Oh my sempiternal Sy ... you have written MANY of these rhymes divine and engraved your name upon this heart of mine. You do know how cool this poem is dont ya me Stinkylove? Clever vocab, word play and theme employ here Sy-babes...and of course your gift of rhyme always shines and tickles our tongues with delight... Raspberry rhymes me thinks *winkiewinkie* |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling boy this is utterly utterly wonderful, absolutely perfect. YOU delight the senses with this delicious and wondrous poem. I love it. What can I say darling heart you have grown so much in the last few months. Your style decorates and illuminates your gift of poetry with pure wonder. This is incredibly beautiful and I love it utterly utterly. Brilliantly done, it is splendiferous, and truly a Seymour classic. Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sy, as far as sentimental goes nobody does it like you, as far as eternal - always. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Seymour hi there YOU are a really superior writer, this is excellent in it’s use of language, it’s rhyme is picture perfect. This really is one of your best writes, and I would say you are a perpetually a perfect PIP’s poet. I like this one I like it a lot Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
love the way you rhyme and to present us awesome poetry Sey. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
To stay in the passion and minds of all Mission accomplished, Seymour. *S* It happens every time your pen shares a gift with us. *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, As long as I can tickle your tongue to exercize your write. WWRS Marsha, Splendiferous, I can't top that. Keth, Love you too. Kissy, Thank you sweet missy. Charisma, Love your replies. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, Now that I like. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice Seymour...James |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
a delightfully fun read!! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You do, you are, you will, you can! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I love you, too, Sy |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
yeppers gonna have to ditto suthern on this one....wonderful poem *smiles* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you James. Thank you VAS. Martie, All of those? LOL Interloper, thank you. Jellybeans, I was just in the mood for some jellybeans, thank you. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) This is so beautiful, sweet friend, may your lovers sigh forever be the eternal rhyme you sing from your heart and greet you every morning like a roosters crow and warble like the morning songbirds! (big huggssssss) This is outstanding, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Like passions butter that enwraps the heart The wave of a flag on a poles rampart dang, you've done it again! Such fun your writing is.....Mr. Tabin~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...more than fun...they're tongue-twisters... |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ah, now see? I get here late, and all the responses above have said everything I was thinking, lol. Will a simple "This was wonderful!" still let you know I think this was marvelous Sy? Best wishes, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Always enjoy your comments. BlueSerenade, Your reply is a serenade. Sunshine, Kit, |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Yes, what they said I cannot think of anything new to add. Sandra |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sandra, Thank you so much. |
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