Open Poetry #20 |
The Bubble |
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
The Bubble We live within a bubble Tougher then the toughest skin And scar it with our trouble Mental and our phallic sin We tear and wound the inner wall With blaspheme and wherewithal And do not see the lovely green The sea and land and in-between We fill the air with noxious fume And on the land leave little room. We make our waste to over plus That comes around and back to us. We’re shredding up the envelope Beyond a hope beyond our cope And I for one sincerely pray That God will not allow this day My time is done still children come Whatever the end his will be done. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
We live within a bubble Tougher then the toughest skin And scar it with our trouble Mental and our phallic sin We tear and wound the inner wall With blaspheme and wherewithal And do not see the lovely green The sea and land and in-between ===================================== We're shredding up the envelope Beyond a hope beyond our cope ===================================== Stinkylove...you speak the truth wrapped in your wisdom rhymes divine.I love this metaphor of a bubble for the earth...how very very cool!!! As always, things begin to make sense when we see them thru your eyes of wise. Ive said before...your poetry of conscious & conscience needs to be submitted to Earth Day and environmentalists sites!! Your wisdom rhymes could help educate the planet!!! and thats very very cool!! But then you are the poster poet for cool!! *winkiewinkie* When man is lead to arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Randy sheds a tear you are so near and yet so far. He has set himself to fly, to gather you a star. Winkiewinkie,Randy Stinky. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
We fill the air with noxious fume And on the land leave little room. You've just described Houston to a "t"... any wonder it's where I reside but never call home? *S* This is wonderful, Seymour... a wakeup call that should pierce every ear... Well done! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Morning Sy! Very true words here my poet friend. Is it too late for us to wake up, listen and learn? Never! Well said....Hugs. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You're good! "We fill the air with noxious fume And on the land leave little room. We make our waste to over plus That comes around and back to us. We’re shredding up the envelope Beyond a hope beyond our cope And I for one sincerely pray That God will not allow this day My time is done still children come Whatever the end his will be done." I'm with you all the way! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ You just 'burst my bubble'~ (don't have a popping bubble ... so I'll just *grin*) Tee-Hee ... you are the 'master blaster' poet~ Very well done, sir~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, Thank you for the well done, Enchantress, Morning dear, thank you Thank you ethome you are a dear friend. Marge, And you are a sweetheart, |
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bags123 Member
since 2002-06-06
Posts 128 |
Humans can really make a mess of things can't we? Very good verse. Thanks |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Bags123, Yes we can, thank you. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy Thoughtful and well done, wise poet! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Thank you dear reader. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
BRAVO!!! Oh Seymour, this is sad but filled with hiope, sweet friend, I believe it is never too late to correct our faults for we are here until His is done and we know what it takes, it only involves finesse to have the courage to do so! (sigh) This is striking, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Aw Sy... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
We fill the air with noxious fume And on the land leave little room. We make our waste to over plus That comes around and back to us. Excellent and more excellent writing on this one, Sy....Thank you for sharing it. This is all so very true. We are totally polluting our air and running out of room to live. I guess we'll all have to start living on the moon soon. ~ hugs for a cleaner environment Lyra |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Thank you my friend. Sunshine, But I still love you. Lyra, Thank you my dear. :squeze: |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
As always, I am brought to my feet in applaud. ThisDiamond |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ThisDiamond Once again thank you for the read and comment. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
So what difference could one single person actually make, eh?? The answer is simple.. LOTS.. Great verse, sweet Sy.. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
again we are reminded of the disasterous course we've laid for ourselves and the environment, thanks for sharing Sy. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, I'm with you dear. ecrivan It has become an impossible task, Thanks for the reply. |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Seymour again your writing is so very very good. The style and the flow are as always perfect. Mum sends you a kiss and says she’s sorry she’s not been on here today. She’s had me working my fingers off here, and she’s sat there looking at me. Actually she’s been working too but don’t tell her I admitted that This as always is really great writing I love it, you are the most entertaining writer you know, and always manage to make me react to your wonderful poems. Which is the mark of an excellent writer Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Seymour, I'm not sure who to quote on this, but I've heard it said that we do not inherit the land from our ancestors, but that we borrow it from our children. Your write seems to reflect that senitment, very well written. |
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wornways Member
since 2001-10-18
Posts 204CA, USA |
neat piece. creatively approached. metre precise. quite nice. my personal hope is that we may, at some point, move beyond this bubble and disperse amongst the bubbles of the cosmos... but, we're being a bunch of near sighted pinheads. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Krissy, Thank you dear and give a hug and kiss to mum Gemini, Very nice comment, thank you. wornways, Possible but I have my doubts. |
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