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Sail Away
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Sail Away |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Embracing a mirage a look alike of what used to be memories rain through a funnel awash in uncertainty of ever more that never was. Holding and releasing flowing through me a vessel leading away from the dock drifts farther from the landing unsure of what I'm feeling. Yet I stare in quiet awe at each port along the seaside and all the places we've been before rocked by the breeze and the warm intent of familiar. With each rising breath I curve against the sway heading towards the harbor lights weathered by the storm and the certainty of knowing my love has run it's course. Never to sail away again .... |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
------------- Embracing a mirage a look alike of what used to be memories rain through a funnel awash in uncertainty of ever more that never was. -------------- I love this stanza. Life feels like this one stanza I love it great work.!! Godbless |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The warm intent of familiar... One of the best expressed lyrics yet! I enjoyed the entire work! Bravo! ThisDiamond |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A beautifully written reflective, sad sailing trip. Good imagery here! "memories rain through a funnel awash in uncertainty of ever more that never was" |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
I like this too. The imagery, looking at the land from sea. Very good metaphor. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Yes, always let your heart be the searchlight to find what you desire and may you always follow the lighthouse light to seek all your dreams, for they will all come true! (sigh) This is wonderfully said, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
enjoyed it ms bluezy, naughtical (grin) looks good on your pen |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Some wonderful word pictures in this piece! I enjoyed the read! |
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