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Together forever .
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Together forever . |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Together Forever, the face I will see . I love you now, I loved you then, I’ll love you tomorrow, I’ll love you when . When I wake in the morning, When I slip in to sleep, I loved when we met, It’s a love I will keep . Even when you leave, When you walk out that door, I’ll love you then, Deep inside of my core . This love I can’t help, It will destroy me I know, It’s a love you don’t feel, I wish you could show . I want us forever, I want us to last, I want us to have, A love that’s been cast . Together forever, I want us to be, I need you I know, Without you I’m not me . This love I can’t loss, Even when it causes my end, The letters on my gravestone, ‘Please come and mend’. This love is so tragic, In my last moment of life, I will see it forever, Eternally my strife . Written by Tom Baker .© 'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
now this has just enough lyric and rhythm to make it sing. . . well done. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Being an old songwriter myself I'd have to agree with Sven...it's got a real musical flow. Tremendously sad all the same....maybe for the blues! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tom~ This is truly very nice~ A wonderfully soft read~ It's good to see you ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Tom darling boy this is an absolutely wonderful piece from you. I love it, The flow and the structure of this is excellent, and the rhythm and lyric is perfect for a Blues song, I can see this being sung and a smoky bar somewhere by a sultry singer. Very well written This is exquisite writing darling absolutely exquisite, I love it utterly utterly   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Tom, this is soooooo beautifully but all so sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and being a rising songwriter, I know this will make a wonderful song too! (sigh) Our hearts go out to you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light alwaysd shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Oh my god; thankyou all so much ... i never expected so many of you lovely people to read and reply to this . Your all so kind, I truly wish that I was a good enough singer to put the poem to music - I'm afraid my voice sounds a little something like a crocodile mixed with a parrot (quite a funny thought actually) . Anyhows, thanks again your kind words as always light up my heart . L.of.L. Tom. XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX 'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'. |
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