Open Poetry #20 |
Lovers..... |
Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
They come They go Some fast Some slow.. Some frown Some smile Some stay Awhile But, in the end I always know It's all pretend They come They go. Perhaps Some day I'll find A way To make them feel They want to stay But it has never Happened so I'm not that clever They come They go. They come They go Ducks in A row Each takes a part Of shattered heart They leave as friend Or sometimes foe But, in the end, They come They go... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sad sigh) Oh Michael, this is a sad but true kind of game that happens with so many peoples hearts, sweet friend, but in this game where there will be many ducks that may not be true to our hearts, there will always be that goose that will forever remain with a lover to eternity! (big hugggsssss) I hope you have found this kind of love, sweet friend, you deserve it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
There's always duck tape! I always enjoy the upbeat and easy going style of your work. Another keeper. ThisDiamond |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Hope I'm not laughing at your expense, Michael...but I'm laughing just the same. Though, it has been my unfortunate experience that the ones who stay...are usually the ones I wish would go! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Noah...I will wait patiently for that goose! Thank you, sir!! Diamond lady...why didn't I think of that?! I've been trying crazy glue!! Duncan....LOL! Ain't it the truth!?! [This message has been edited by Balladeer (04-12-2002 10:30 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What sound does a goose make? LOL...very good 'Deer...very good.... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
you have always had a way of getting to me |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Perhaps Some day I'll find A way To make them feel They want to stay I console myself with knowing whose loss it is. I liked this. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Diamond's reply made me laugh, your poem made me smile and I was feeling so |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I like the duck tape idea too, Michael... How about duck sauce to make them a bit more tasty I love Peking Duck! a beautiful poem...well written and full of the truth of life. ~ducky hugs~ copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mike, What ever you write you write well. Enjoyed. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Balladeer~ very nice....I have come to find your work, truthful..with much meaning..be well.... Lauren~ Step through the |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
nice write yuh yuh |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I'll always stay right there with you |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
'deer, Yours is the first house I've seen with a revolving door on the front porch! LOL Great write... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Aw, now if I had time this morning, I would have answered this poetically, but I'm off to catch a plane. A wonderful write Michael, loved the flow and pattern within. Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is a bit different than your normal verse, but exceptionally done! I enjoyed it. It reads like a poetic shrug (what can you do?). |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
’Deer dearest heart OH my this is just too perfect, I love it, this a different and superb piece of writing from you. The flow as always absolutely perfect. Others may drift in and out Moving restlessly full of doubt They come and then they go Eternally drifting ebb and flow They might have been and gone But they are shiftless moving on I’m not into moonlit flits I not one of those flighty bits Butterflies flit without a care Stopping never anywhere Wings always moving ever on Here a moment then they’re gone I’m not a butterfly I like to stay For longer than a single day I want a place where I can remain Someone to return to yet again Marsha Forgive me ‘Deer I couldn’t resist this really is exceptional writing Krissy darling daughter there’s another 2 points to me, you might be younger darling but I’m still winning Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Gee and here all this time I thought that is what lovers were supposed to do ~* Sharon *~ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Oh yes..hopefully there is a long line of lovers somewhere out there..waiting for me..ha..I just cant find them ~Victoria [This message has been edited by Victoria (04-13-2002 12:54 PM).] |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Great poem. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
ah how true and I like it a lot Dear Deer. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Oh you sweet Deer you let them go By now I gathered you should know before you'll find the right one though you have to let some come and go Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Here I am... once again... at the end of the line. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I really like this style from you, and of course the flow, message and rhyme is perfect! And ain't it the truth...those exotic men in thongs never stay when I want them too either! Hmpf, that's it, I'm becoming a nun! Take care patootie guy, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ Not so quickly my good man You took my heart now take my hand I am not the traveling kind by now you know that I am thine~ But just in case whatzer name reads this Bye, bye ... catch this kiss~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ Fickle critters, aren't we ? ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sunshine...that depends on the goosee! Doreen..that's one of the greatest compliments I could ever get.... bluesserenade...exactly! That's the right way to feel.... midnitesun...glad we could brighten your mood!!!! Madame C...here I write a heartbreaking poem of loss and despair and you all make fun of it...great! I LOVE THIS PLACE!! Sy...my thanks, good sir.. Lauren...such a nice thing to say...thank you, lady.. wayoutwalt...thanks for stopping by, sir.. SEA...you do...in my dreams Larry C..I had that door taken out years ago!!!! (who told ya?) Kit...catch that plane! Don't miss that plane!!!! deVine one..that's exactly what it is...! Mushy lady..nicely said! Flutter by any time! Mysteria...LOL! Maybe that IS what they are supposed to do!! Victoria....the line waiting for you would fill Madison Square Garden! (and I'd be at its head!) walker...I thank you, sir.. Charisma...always a pleasure to hear from you!! Titia..you little devil! A perfect reply!! Enchantress....but first in the hearts of (many) men.. Melissa..you as a nun would be a tragic loss for mankind! Get up on that stage and grab 'em!!! Marge...fickle doesn't even come close!!! (but I love ya anyway) |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I came back for another read, once more, your words really touch me (I'm with Doreen)! This deserves another spin around the forum. "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
How's about a lasso??? Just come within a rope's length of Cape Cod & you're in trouble, Deer.. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
They come They go Yet even so We learn to live We learn to give They touch our heart Right from the start And footprint there Though unaware They come They go They come They go And whose to know When one fine day Fate interplays And they're the one Our gleaming sun They come They stay ...inspiring Balladeer |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love PDV's description... a poetic shrug. *S* Only I suspect the shoulders doing the shrugging are sore... so that every shrug hurts. *S* But some moments with some people are worth the emptiness that comes when they go. *S* This is magnificent, Deer One... |
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