Open Poetry #20 |
If But For A Moment... |
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
In the shimmer of a dream’s mome’ or the parsec of life’s beat. Where flowers eternally bloom in the soil, warm under feet. Through the toils of lasting light or the smiles once bright Where the burdens come to be ever less, once lightly. As the dream takes to flight when the heart beats light or the slumber says softly in whispers, meaningfully. Take the hand of comfort close into the bosom of thy soul Lest it be of not what chose in ring of bell, toll to be Grace mine eyes of beauty’s view before the dawn, and moon of new Softly take me within your hold tell again, those words...once told I intentionally didn’t make the meter right... This just fell from my moment... |
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my3monkeytoes Member
since 2002-05-11
Posts 152In the Carolina Breeze |
...and it fell perfectly. I really enjoy your writing, Magnus. It's obvious there's some Carolina in you. ~SM |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
quote: Yes... yes... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ 'Grace mine eyes of beauty’s view before the dawn, and moon of new Softly take me within your hold tell again, those words...once told' *sighs* from Florida~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
BRAVO!!! This is wonderful, sweet friend, I too could feel the breeze of the Atlantic reading this and watching magnolias bloom in these soft words! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all loove you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I intentionally didn’t make the meter right... This just fell from my moment..." Not to worry about meter...Barry...this is wonderful! YES!! Big sighs! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Nice moment you had Magnus! Some good work came out of it! Like this...... "Grace mine eyes of beauty’s view before the dawn, and moon of new Softly take me within your hold tell again, those words...once told" Those moments make it all worth it! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling boy your writing is without doubt so incredibly moving, it simply falls on my soul like a whisper of wonder, breathed in awe by an angel’s Oh! You always manage to cloak my soul in an aura of delight. Your words fall like moonlit shadows that grace the ground with silvered light. This is purely an Ohhhhh of softness stroking my skin with a hint of fire. I love it utterly utterly, YOU never cease to amaze me and always I value your writing. You can tell can’t you, drat I wonder what gives me away It must be my delicate hint of I love this utterly utterly that does it, hmmmmm? As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Magnus...Your poem is the glimmer of moonbeams dancing off the stars. At least, that's how it feels to me. Lovely, romantic, poem!!!!!! ***Ivy Rose |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Take the hand of comfort close into the bosom of thy soul Lest it be of not what chose in ring of bell, toll to be Damn, Barry...loved the missed meter! (If you say so) You still speak to my heart. Desperate for changing |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I would REALLY like to know how you do that! You wow me everytime I read your work! Keep it up, eh? |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
meter shmeter...it's from your heart so it's perfect |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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