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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Consumption The tarry warmth of covers spread Wrapped about me reposed in bed. While dreaming naked trails of dare And running rampant still, butt bare. It’s often that I travel thus Deep within this omnibus That brings about a twitch a turn Unconscious of the things I yearn. Surprised or not they are my lot It’s been this way, since I was tot I rarely dream the dreams I would Although I try and wish I could. I never know the dreams I find For some of them are most unkind And wake me in a worried sweat That takes me time to sort and set. But I’ve learned clues about neaps reap And what to eat before you sleep |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
...and what NOT to... I agree completely, oh wise one...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, We must have read the same book.  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sy, lol, you got me with the last line, it was so clever. Now I know why people can die from consumption. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
so cool sy...you bend it and make it fit well done and enjoyed |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
bravo! yes.... this I understand well! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Keth, Funny thank you. Dark Stranger Big thank you. Capt Hair, Wonderful thank you. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling boy this is as always perfect, the flow the rhyme the pace absolutely excellent. You definitely caught me with the title and the last line I am very impressed, but then you are a very impressive writer who always leaves a mark on me. I ought to be Green with jealousy. However how can I be jealous of this it is utterly wonderful. You really are a writer pas extrodinaire And you know I love this don’t you? MMmmm I do it’s delicious, eating this before bedtime would give me beautiful dreams As always Mushy    To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 [This message has been edited by Marsha (04-12-2002 09:34 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'll take the blankest book I've got write down what me ate, and then when dreamscape shows me what is wrought I'll eat some more, and dream again... only you, Sy...only you... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The tarry warmth of covers spread Wrapped about me reposed in bed. While dreaming naked trails of dare And running rampant still, butt bare. It's often that I travel thus Deep within this omnibus That brings about a twitch a turn Unconscious of the things I yearn. Surprised or not they are my lot It's been this way, since I was tot I rarely dream the dreams I would Although I try and wish I could. ================================== It dont get any cooler than that first verse this tasty tease in please of dreamer's curse The secret to dreaming is what one eats before bed? Not the wishes and wantings that scheme in our head? To tune my dreams of swoon in sleep's cocoon ... All I need is to eat thy rhymes with a spoon. ~~ *winkiewinkie*  |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Thanks Seymour for your insight I shall now be careful of my nightly appetite LOL Hope I am way much better when "daydreaming |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"The tarry warmth of covers spread Wrapped about me reposed in bed. While dreaming naked trails of dare And running rampant still, butt bare." Sy I love the picture of you above..the hole poem has your charm and inner wisdom. Hugs! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love this, Seymour... from the incredible image of "The tarry warmth of covers" to the delightful play upon the title... It's infinitely palatable. *G* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marsha, Forgot to mention there are two kinds of eating. LOL Sunshine, Thank you my sunshine, JM, Yes, that is another poem. WWDS Love Ya HopeS, Also what you think. Martie, Thanks and love you too. Suthern, Now that is a hearty meal. LOL |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Seymour, That's neat. I never dream anything sensible at all. But I never eat anything sensible at all, so that explains it, I guess.   Nan |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, It's always fun to experiment. Thanks for the read. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) I think we can all be consumed in this kind of desire, sweet friend, I too always yearn to find my dreams and I get lost in so many of them I don't know if it is worth excavating! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you Noah, always enjoy your comments. |
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