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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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we went to step down place where we didn't need shoe feet we knew the sand warm songs and our fingers made one hand when they were together the tall trees held shapes we stood in their shadows and touched with our eyes our lips whispered quiet noise like skin touching edges of breaths sky colors were our ocean then when we played in cloud pools and let the blue dye our skin and make us invisible to the eyes of the wish watchers that dream you wrote a poem for me and left it under my pillow I slept on your belly skin soft and read the words there I read them aloud and you laughed at how many times I repeated them ©Dark |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
I love how you take everyday things and make them magic. Btw Happy Birthday! There's the man I chose. There's my territory.....Shakira |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
phachi, thanks lady for the read and the bd stuff..sweet of you |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Wonderful writing, I enjoyed very much ~HUGS~ Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This... this is a McKuen song which I would listen to, again... Kudos...and have a pleasant day... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
T66, thanks for your read and words.. sunshine, morning lady, thank you for your smile..and I hope Rod don't mind |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Happy Birthday DS  what to get the poet who has everything??? hmmmmm .... ahhh ... I know.... blow out your candles and make a wish   I remembering being one and the same ... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Wow, I love this, sweet friend, you never fail to make me smile with your lovely visions! (smiles) Now how about what Janet said for your birthday wish? LOL! This is a delightful read, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Stranger You tickled me on that one. Happy Birthday |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Morning Dark~ I especially love the last stanza.. leaves happy mind thoughts. and.... ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
janet marie....hmmmm ok I made my wish looking around for you now..(thanks babe) noah...must be a error..I haven't had a b day for 3 years now...thanks amigo Sy, thanks for the grin and the wave guy!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
McKuen, mind? I think he would be honored... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Enchantress..slow hugs and thanks lady... always a pleasure to have your touch there Sunshine..thanks for that thought babe...I am a fan of his for sure |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS...A good place to see things from, your eyes. I hope you have a good birthday!! |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
at how many times I repeated them" DS~ Such a peaceful place...I love the last two lines, they make me smile Happy birthday you! Hugs, ~Krista Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie, thanks lil neighbor I appreciate your touches smitty kitty, thank you lady for the smile and the wish of happy b'z |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
nicely done [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (05-29-2002 06:28 PM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Maureen, thank you for the wishes and the wishes, yes the memories from past days and other boards do ring as vivid memories |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
sky colors were our ocean then when we played in cloud pools and let the blue dye our skin and make us invisible to the eyes of the wish watchers that dream Sooo I get to sneak in here late and have the advantage of bumping this back to the top.. This stanza makes me see the invisible thoughts you weave into the mind..a beautiful..blend..of dreams and skin..Love this! I do hope you had a wonderful birthday. Sincerely, Reg |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ah, a birthday boy, eh? Gemini rising! Was it today (28th) or? Good treed pome. Cor |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hmmmmm...a step down and a little venture into the darkness eh? Must be something to see, for those who dare to go there. I liked your poem and Happy BIrTHdAy big fella~[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-29-2002 01:52 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Like this...especially the last six lines...James |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Regina, thanks babe, mmmm enjoy you sneeking in...before the bad daddy catches you thanks for the b-day wishes..wanna sing hapbday to me? Cor, yes today..but the last I am going to recognize...39 is far enough don't you think? thanks for the read ms Bluzy, dark, ??? what? just about the glass court at the raquetball club...(grin) thanks babe for the read and the b day stuff James thank you sir for the review. |
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