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ShadowRider
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0 posted 2002-04-11 07:42 PM


                  

                      "The Eyes of a Child"

            Oh, of that noble glory that thrives
            The fearless youth has not a withered mind
            They know not yet of deceit or lies
            No need to repent for a vile mankind.

            A dauntless good and passionate zeal
            Their innocence intact, so undefiled
            These are the virtues, to them so real
            As seen and felt thru the eyes of a child.

            A life of change, a measure of toil
            Unschooled infant of unchalked slate
            Gives promise and wisdom to even the Royal
            Hearts untarnished; still immune from all hates.

            It is thru their lives, that I wish so to live
            Recapture the knowledge only they possess
            Lost long ago as my experiences thus hid
            That was a turned into tear from woe and duress.

            For I failed, oh so miserably, to recall
            A life lesson that upon me lay piled
            Unrealized, unheeded; a tumbling wall
            that can be stoutly rebuilt
            Thru the Eyes of a Child.


    (c) 2002 Picasso Lyrics

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Magnus
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1 posted 2002-04-11 07:52 PM


Humbling and awesome....magnificent write..

IF only we all could go back...

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2 posted 2002-04-11 07:56 PM


nothing like the innocence of a child..it is so heartwarming to look into their eyes..and see them smiling with/at you..hugss lovely Jeff

                     ~Victoria

Martie
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3 posted 2002-04-11 08:13 PM


Jeff

"For I failed, oh so miserably, to recall
            A life lesson that upon me lay piled
            Unrealized, unheeded; a tumbling wall
            that can be stoutly rebuilt
            Thru the Eyes of a Child."

My favorite stanza above, but the whole poem was wonderful and spirit filled.

Krissy
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4 posted 2002-04-11 08:16 PM


Jeff Hi there my friend this is incredible writing, I love this I really do. You are an amazing writer, and this is an incredibly beautiful piece from you it flows with such a lovely soft flow. Could this be any smoother? I don’t think so, excellent writing. Well done


Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy


And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

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5 posted 2002-04-11 08:28 PM




(smiles) This is sooooooo beautifully touching, sweet friend, it too makes me feel sad how we all lose iocence as we grow older and how if only we can hang on to a necessary amount of it and harmonize to one another with love much more easily! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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6 posted 2002-04-11 08:32 PM


Magnus:  its a romance of fantasy, going back to a pleasant
and calm naiviety.  A Major 'If only' is due here, huh?  Thanks good Bard!

Vic:  ~looooong hug~  i know, where have i been......well....i have been
scattered to the wind.  Vic, i think you know me well enough to know, i have
the spirit of a youngster, and take my mentorship of goodness from children.
Only they know its true meaning.  *smiles*   Be good, and be well.

Jeff

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7 posted 2002-04-11 08:33 PM


Jeff, this is a wonderful...heartfelt piece.
Enjoyed much~Hugs.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

ShadowRider
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8 posted 2002-04-11 08:37 PM


Hi Martie!  que pasa' mi amiga?  You know those velvet paintings of wide-eyed
children that look a tad bewildered?  that was my inspiration for this.  It doesn't
take much.  Thankx, Fine Lady, for your support!  

Krissy!  Hi my young, but oooo so wise friend.  I bet, when you were a really
tender lass of 4 or 5 you were a bit precocious and waaaaay too astute for
your own good, right? *wink*    welll......i had a bit of that streak in me too,
only thing...
i never outgrew it!  hahaha   ~wish you could see my warm smile, Krissy~

Thankx so much y'all!~
Jeff

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9 posted 2002-04-11 08:41 PM


Noah:  hellloooooooo back!  hey, i see where you are moderator!~  waytogo, Amigo!
couldnt happen to a better candidate.  You are perrrrfect for the role.  
Pudding smooth, huh?  awwwww thankx amigo!   I try.......

Nance!~  Hey there sweet Gal!  where would a night of poetry be without
one of my favorite critics!   I can take it....dish it out!  nudge nudge
Children are my favorite reality muse.  Mine are grown, but everywhere
i go, they stll make me wish i was playing alongside of them!

You are both verrrry special people, whose words
i treasure both in poetry, and in friendship.

Thanks y'all!  ~hugggg back~
jeff

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10 posted 2002-04-11 09:26 PM


A life of change, a measure of toil
            Unschooled infant of unchalked slate
            Gives promise and wisdom to even the Royal
            Hearts untarnished; still immune from all hates.

A beautiful description of a child's innocence, Jeff.

~innocent hugs~

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Dulcinea
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11 posted 2002-04-12 04:17 PM


It captures a lot of memories and thoughts for me, and some other tucked away lessons I have learned along the way...beautifully done baby.

Only one little minor stumbing stone...in this line:

That was a turned into tear from woe and duress.

would it be better if you removed the "a" or moved it to between "into" and "tear"? Just a suggestion.



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