Open Poetry #20 |
the Eyes of a Child |
ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Oh, of that noble glory that thrives The fearless youth has not a withered mind They know not yet of deceit or lies No need to repent for a vile mankind. A dauntless good and passionate zeal Their innocence intact, so undefiled These are the virtues, to them so real As seen and felt thru the eyes of a child. A life of change, a measure of toil Unschooled infant of unchalked slate Gives promise and wisdom to even the Royal Hearts untarnished; still immune from all hates. It is thru their lives, that I wish so to live Recapture the knowledge only they possess Lost long ago as my experiences thus hid That was a turned into tear from woe and duress. For I failed, oh so miserably, to recall A life lesson that upon me lay piled Unrealized, unheeded; a tumbling wall that can be stoutly rebuilt Thru the Eyes of a Child. (c) 2002 Picasso Lyrics |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Humbling and awesome....magnificent write.. IF only we all could go back... |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
nothing like the innocence of a child..it is so heartwarming to look into their eyes..and see them smiling with/at you..hugss lovely Jeff ~Victoria |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jeff "For I failed, oh so miserably, to recall A life lesson that upon me lay piled Unrealized, unheeded; a tumbling wall that can be stoutly rebuilt Thru the Eyes of a Child." My favorite stanza above, but the whole poem was wonderful and spirit filled. |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Jeff Hi there my friend this is incredible writing, I love this I really do. You are an amazing writer, and this is an incredibly beautiful piece from you it flows with such a lovely soft flow. Could this be any smoother? I don’t think so, excellent writing. Well done Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) This is sooooooo beautifully touching, sweet friend, it too makes me feel sad how we all lose iocence as we grow older and how if only we can hang on to a necessary amount of it and harmonize to one another with love much more easily! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Magnus: its a romance of fantasy, going back to a pleasant and calm naiviety. A Major 'If only' is due here, huh? Thanks good Bard! Vic: ~looooong hug~ i know, where have i been......well....i have been scattered to the wind. Vic, i think you know me well enough to know, i have the spirit of a youngster, and take my mentorship of goodness from children. Only they know its true meaning. *smiles* Be good, and be well. Jeff |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Jeff, this is a wonderful...heartfelt piece. Enjoyed much~Hugs. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Hi Martie! que pasa' mi amiga? You know those velvet paintings of wide-eyed children that look a tad bewildered? that was my inspiration for this. It doesn't take much. Thankx, Fine Lady, for your support! Krissy! Hi my young, but oooo so wise friend. I bet, when you were a really tender lass of 4 or 5 you were a bit precocious and waaaaay too astute for your own good, right? *wink* welll......i had a bit of that streak in me too, only thing... i never outgrew it! hahaha ~wish you could see my warm smile, Krissy~ Thankx so much y'all!~ Jeff |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Noah: hellloooooooo back! hey, i see where you are moderator!~ waytogo, Amigo! couldnt happen to a better candidate. You are perrrrfect for the role. Pudding smooth, huh? awwwww thankx amigo! I try....... Nance!~ Hey there sweet Gal! where would a night of poetry be without one of my favorite critics! I can take it....dish it out! nudge nudge Children are my favorite reality muse. Mine are grown, but everywhere i go, they stll make me wish i was playing alongside of them! You are both verrrry special people, whose words i treasure both in poetry, and in friendship. Thanks y'all! ~hugggg back~ jeff |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A life of change, a measure of toil Unschooled infant of unchalked slate Gives promise and wisdom to even the Royal Hearts untarnished; still immune from all hates. A beautiful description of a child's innocence, Jeff. ~innocent hugs~ copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
It captures a lot of memories and thoughts for me, and some other tucked away lessons I have learned along the way...beautifully done baby. Only one little minor stumbing stone...in this line: That was a turned into tear from woe and duress. would it be better if you removed the "a" or moved it to between "into" and "tear"? Just a suggestion. |
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