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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2002-05-25 03:10 AM

I can only write cliche'--
satin lips and hips that sway
that certain taste, exquisite smell--
If heaven be where angels dwell
and should I find you without wing
no halo or the choirs of sing
Then give to me the choice of Hell...
for where you be?
I will ring bells.
Understanding, angel's fall--
for you? I would not be at all.
I'd give up my identitiy
and chop my wings, most willingly.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2002-05-25 03:11 AM

wooooooo! I do love the way you write!

"Understanding, angel's fall--
for you? I would not be at all.
I'd give up my identitiy
and chop my wings, most willingly."

definately...

[This message has been edited by SEA (05-25-2002 03:12 AM).]

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

2 posted 2002-05-25 04:19 AM

heh - you know i can choose what kinda hell for you baby! cute... even though it RHYMES!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2002-05-25 07:17 AM

I can only write cliche'-- NOT

satin lips and hips that sway
that certain taste, exquisite smell--
=====================================
Understanding, angel's fall--
for you? I would not be at all.
I'd give up my identitiy
and chop my wings, most willingly.
=====================================
*hugging myself* (because its like hugging you)
you know I am loving every single word of this...every exqusite rhyme divine...
you wrote a moth declaration baby!!!!
How could I not love this...I felt it.
the title says an excerpt...I WANT IT ALL...
wheres the rest???
send it when you send the vials