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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Your face is my bright morning, Your smile my breaking dawn. I don’t know how to keep you, But I’m praying to be shown. I don’t want to lose you But what words can I say? I’m afraid I’ll sound too needy, But please don’t drift away. Your laughter sparks my longing, You are grace personified. How could someone so perfect Spend a lifetime by my side? The thought that I could lose you Never once occurred to me. If you go then take me with you, If not, then you can’t leave. Your hair is frosted moonglow Agleam in summer shine. The years have touched you lightly- You’ve aged like finest wine. I’m afraid to lose you- There are no words to say. If you insist on leaving, Don’t think that I can stay. Your pain just goes on growing, And sorrow stabs my heart. We’re meant to be together, Must God tear us apart? I never knew I’d lose you; I thought love guaranteed That you and I were always- We defined eternity. Nan |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I found too much of myself in here to pick out the lines that hit me most. Heck of a write Nan If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Thanks, Tracey! Nan |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Nancy, this is sooooooo heartaching, sweet friend, I hope everything is alright and that love has truly found a place in your heart where both of you can be together forever! (sigh) This is a striking emotional piece, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nancy, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh, thanks Noah. But this isn't about me. I'm all alone and happy that way. This is a bit about my parents, my dad passed away a year ago last March. And about some others I've known. In fact, several older couples I've known. When one passes away, it's like the other one is lost, and hurries after. I usually write in the first person, so I know it's confusing. Nan |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Nan darling girl OH YES!! This is exceptional writing, utterly utterly brilliant. You knew I’d love this, the stars themselves will pause in their nightly dance to genuflect to you tonight, this is perfect. How can you write soooooo beautifully time after time? All I know is that you consistently amaze me with the power and the beauty of your words. YOU truly are the writer of wonder, No one does it like you darling heart no one. Ahhhhhhhh and yes I love it utterly utterly love it. You guessed didn’t you? Mmmm subtlety was never my strong suit This is utter bliss I tried to email you but it kept bouncing back drop me a line darling heart please   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hi Nan, Interesting how you've touched on a such a troublesome moment...thanks for sharing  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A nice expression...James |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Nan hi there, again your writing is so very very good. The style and the flow are as always perfect. Mum got here before me I see She’s had me working my fingers off here, and she’s sat there looking at me. Actually she’s been working too but don’t tell her I admitted that This as always is really great writing I love it, you are the most entertaining writer you know, and always manage to make me react to your wonderful poems. Which is the mark of an excellent writer I’m looking forward to meeting you in September, your writing is simply amazing. Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nancy~ There's a soft, delicate lining of poetic thought here~ 'I never knew I’d lose you; I thought love guaranteed That you and I were always- We defined eternity.' Oh my ... how lovely~ Thank you for sharing this~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Very enduring. I know what you mean, its almost like two people are there for each other, and only live for that reason, without one another the one left behind finds it difficult to go on. Sad and romantic at the same time. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Man I felt the pain. That was a awesome write. Julie Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I never knew I’d lose you; I thought love guaranteed That you and I were always- We defined eternity. This is beautiful and so well expressed, Nan. I knew it was about dying because as I was reading it...it brought back the feelings I had when my first husband was dying... I really wanted to go with him. Losing him was so hard. My kids thought I was crazy because I didn't want to bury him...I kept wanting to bring him home from the funeral home and just keep him with me. But, I'm glad I didn't go with him now...and I also understand why I couldn't just bring him home. I think grief makes us terribly irrational. Thanks for sharing this with us. ~ loving hugsLyra |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Thanks, guys, I thought nobody saw this one at all, or I did a bad job of writing it. This makes me feel better. Nan |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Nan, You doing a bad job of writing? Yeah...right, not! Wow...you know how much this also means to me without even saying. A real keeper. Thanks Nan so very much. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Larry, Thanks for your reply. I thought I might have laid it on too thick. I usually try to be restrained in the emotion department, but this was how I thought it should be written so I went all out. I'm proud that so many people seem to think I did it right after all. Nan |
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