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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-05-24 12:40 PM

I floated to her surface.
We magnified the sun.
The salt of dewing sweat
upon the crashing shore.

We floated to the surface
of magnifying sun.
And then the sky fell over.
Her eyes were green as clover.

I floated to the surface
of extinguished sun.
Held its coldness in my hands.
Squeezed the dead star gone.

We floated to the surface
and spun like waxy water.
I wish I knew yr laughter.
I wish I knew what was the matter.

We float on to the surface
and learn to hold on.
The sun has turned to moonbeams.
The stars all leak and run.

We float down to the surface
and pray the darkness ends.
Going down straight river.
Yet still finding the bends.

We float to the surface.
Into each other's arms.
The night is long and cold.
Keep us safe from harm.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

1 posted 2002-05-24 12:50 PM

This is fantastic, especially the lines:
'The sun has turned to moonbeams.
The stars all leak and run.'
I love those lines. Wow.

Nan

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2002-05-24 12:58 PM

BSquirrel~

So fully-ripened with imagery is this piece~

'We floated to the surface
of magnifying sun.
And then the sky fell over.
Her eyes were green as clover.'

Just splendid poeticism~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

3 posted 2002-05-24 01:27 PM

The sun has turned to moonbeams.
The stars all leak and run.

Beautiful romantic poetry, Mr.Squirrel

~ furry rodent hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-05-24 01:36 PM

Thanks, everyone.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2002-05-24 02:20 PM

Mike

Love the way you push words over, then pick them back up. You are an original!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2002-05-24 03:21 PM

We floated to the surface
of magnifying sun.
And then the sky fell over.
Her eyes were green as clover.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Enjoyed the read so much this afternoon.
Fantastic imagery here Mike.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-05-24 03:59 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Michael, this is sooooooo romantically beautiful, sweet friedn, may you always be held safe from pain and togetehr kiss each others tears away always in loves joy and comfort! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2002-05-24 06:06 PM

We floated to the surface
of magnifying sun.
=======================
I floated to the surface
of extinguished sun.
Held its coldness in my hands.
Squeezed the dead star gone.
=================================
We float on to the surface
and learn to hold on.
The sun has turned to moonbeams.
The stars all leak and run.
===================================

you paint the sun in the sky and the stars in my eyes...
and its always very very cool....
must be something in the air out there?

I love to OD on your imagery groovy squirrel poet

I remembering being one and the same ...
closer even than the heat and the flame.

Tom Kimmel

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

9 posted 2002-05-24 06:46 PM

Mike darling boy OH my word this is excellent writing, what can I say darling heart your writing shines through every single word. You’ve always written well, often excellently right now you are simply soaring.

You know I love this, it flows with the smoothness of silk, beautiful work darling boy utterly utterly superb, and of course I love it utterly.

The imagery in this is one of your best I think, truly exquisite writing

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

10 posted 2002-05-24 06:50 PM

Thanks, everyone!

I'm glad y' all enjoyed.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

11 posted 2002-05-24 06:51 PM

An' special thanks t' you, Mushy. Hope y' feel better soon!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

12 posted 2002-05-24 06:59 PM

liked it

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

13 posted 2002-05-25 02:27 AM

Mike, I loved every line

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