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Maturity |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Maturity He called me mature or at least acknowledged so, my works ~ but did he hear the soft joyful sigh deep inside as I remembered... When I was callow oh how so the wisdom of the ages from the mouth of sages did I long for then as I see now in the tallow. The wave I crest to watch the best sweep before me in their gilded words of poetry and sigh for I would be as they as they touch on words of young or leave undone a treasured chest for all to read upon. Tact, fiction or fantasy are woven by the best of thee and harboring lights within the night as they write their poetry See? In the flicker of candle's light the quill has yet begun to quiver, enlightening the chest of treasures, in swift of swift, measure for measure, the count of line and heartbeat's leisure, I see maturity in the write, of centered write, the best of me, as did he who called my words mature and now I see as certain sure that I shall reach for youth and more, for surety in the grip of pen and in the grasping gasping grip of me. Repost, Revised |
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CowgirlFreedom17 Member
since 2002-05-20
Posts 82Mississippi |
Great write! Don't hold back the words you really mean. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Yes, yes, over the years all our hearts continue to grow with every graceful swing of the quill and yet while we mature, that innocence is what inspires us to portray such beauty! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, your poems always havce such meaning to them, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, As sure of that as the sun will shine. Good write. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent Sunshine! Your talent is absolutely amazing.... ~Morning Hugs to you~ |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
...wow... this is great!! I loved the flow. [This message has been edited by SEA (05-24-2002 09:14 AM).] |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I like the way you did this, Karilea. Enjoyed reading. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Nice revision. You are both callow and mature in your heart. That's where the energy of spirit comes from....always new but sagely spiced! |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* perfection in poetry flows from this poem like the softest silk...I love the way it felt to read this masterpiece of words... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sunshine..you make maturity seem young and vibrant seductively virgin enjoyed it |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Karilea...I really loved this one...it reminds me of the other night when David and I were watching some of my old videos...and I was thinking about how innocent those times were... Wouldn't it be wonderful if we could have the maturity of our present knowledge mixed with the innocence of our youth and the joy of our poetic words... Beautifully written...  ~ mature hugsLyra |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
The sun is as old as time we know, yet in its touch youth glows... Lovely writing, Karilea! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ 'as they touch on words of young or leave undone a treasured chest for all to read upon' Aaahhhhh~ Such lovely poetic tendrils of thought~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Such is the words of the masters before us who have given us those words to savor and share in our own poetic ways.... Such are these words you have written... Very well done KRJ...very well done.. |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
I really enjoyed the flow of this, such great use of words as well that made it all come together but not be confusing as well. Excellent job. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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