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Love Not Wanted
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Love Not Wanted |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada 
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Love Not Wanted Softness sent from deep within from hidden sources given A dream that love would begin for one whose life is driven A soothing voice to ease pain and give rest to weary mind A hope of dreams to attain was what I wanted to find In the end the sky went dark as eyes open from the dream With empty heart I embark while my heart gives silent scream Offered what I should have not to one I thought who needed Harsh lessons I had forgot and fell in love unheeded Now a star falls from the sky with dreams that are all haunted Once more I hear words “good-bye” to a Love that’s Not Wanted Karen Torbiak ©2002 Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
You write so smoothly, It’s a joy to read and flow along, I just wish it was a better ending for you. Gloom |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautifully penned as always Karen! So nice to see you here again... Do hope you will be able to stay, You have been greatly missed. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
In the end the sky went dark as eyes open from the dream Straight to the heart, Karen. Nice to see ya again! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Beautiful and sad. She said burn ... together. |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you for posting this. I identify strongly with your creation having lived through it a few times. Rejection hurts even though it is a part of life. Still, I find the effort is not wasted for I am a better person in the end. Carry on! I look forward to reading more of your work. INclan |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
There were times when it seemed impossible for me not to feel the flow of love...James |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I knew there was a reason I missed reading your work!  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow! Karen! Sad verses....love's tricky stuff isn't it? A onesided love affair never works and it's so sad for the one with the genuine heart...and I know yours is genuine whether you're just writing this from fiction or not! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
hugs Karen glad to see your words..I was resting and listening to oldies tunes in the sunshine a bit ago and this made me think of Bobby Rydell's Forget Him... if he doesn't love you, forget him if he doesn't care don't let him tell you that he wants you when he can't give you love that isn't there....Sighhhhhhhhhh I know there is a message there somewhere M |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Karen, I have mised you! What a sad poem though. I have surely been there, right where this poem speaks. It hurts. Hugs Sandra |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Karen Hi there, this is lovely, your rhyme and flow in this cannot be bettered. You have been greatly missed, I know mum Mushy has particularly missed your excellent writing. I’ve browsed in the archives and read your work so I also know how well you write. I do hope this isn’t from personal experience, it is very sad, but amazingly well written Mum isn’t very well today, but I know if she were she would be replying to this beauty, you know both mum and I adore your writing, and I think Emma has also picked up the fact you are a terrific writer   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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angeliceyes48198 Junior Member
since 2002-05-28
Posts 16Michigan,USA |
Sad but beautiful! Angeliceyes48198 |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
To find love...though it can never be... is so sad.. To feel love...though it is not given in return...is a travesty.... To be led down a path of dreams...thinking one might have found love...is so hurtful. You have the greatest heart, the most compassion of most anyone I have known.. You are a wonderful and deserving woman.. Hugs... My heart is with you.. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Karen So very sad yet so very beautiful. I have always admired the gentle flow and beauty of your writing and this is no exception. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Beautiful, Karen   ~ teary hugsLyra |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Echoes .... this the word that resounds ... echoes .... of Karen's words, those of loss ... and founds. The star never really falls from the sky ... it just burns brighter on the otherside. welcome home lady...  |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Karen, I have missed your poems. This is a beautiful heartfelt poem. I know how this feels. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You are SO good, Karen. I loved this sad little piece. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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