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Soleil Noir
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since 2001-12-19
Posts 688
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0 posted 2002-05-22 11:34 AM


Moving Moody Ring

crystals shift, colors vary
moving moods defined by ring
there is a list
defining them
defining me by design

ring around my finger
tell
my many moody passions
well

never black, for stress is relieved
by laughter, but
could it be its flaw designed?  For taut are shoulders
and breath is held, but tense
is black defined

is that gray I see within, a bit of
anxious nerve?  Is that why I jump a
bit, when you round
my verve?

no amber seen, no pregnant pause of tense ~
either all or none, I believe, and no
green of average, so am relieved,

but look!  You call, and blending
towards the calm of me,
strike upon the passion tree!  Shake
me clean of all awake
and blue me zeal for passion’s
sake

strive me, drive me to-ward the blue
drive me darker still, until

all we feel is passion’s hue.


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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
1 posted 2002-05-22 12:23 PM


love mood rings
and pendents
that hang there
close to the center

this is deep color cool...enjoyed it

Marsha
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2 posted 2002-05-22 12:28 PM


Soliel Noir darling girl this is wonderful. This is a very special piece from you darling heart, incredible writing full of such visual images. It’s wonderful to see you work absolutely wonderful. I love it utterly utterly love it


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

  

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
3 posted 2002-05-22 12:33 PM


Soleil Noir
Nice write, enjoyed the read.

bsquirrel
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4 posted 2002-05-22 02:24 PM


All I have to say is "Passion Tree" should be the title of yr first collection of poems when yr published. (don't know it till you've tried it )

-m.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Soleil Noir
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since 2001-12-19
Posts 688
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5 posted 2002-06-06 09:48 AM



Wonderful comments all...
thank you!
Especially for the proposed title of
a book to think upon, BSQ...

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