Open Poetry #20 |
Shadow Impressions |
Martie
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Posts 28049California |
Shadow Impressions She hears the soft motor of your far away eyes like the breath of a lion she feels the pull of you within the soft clasp of fog where across the tundra of her map your road creeps She watches for you with her skin too open her safe place turning scarlet anticipation a drum that will not quiet as into the long day it plays her bursting The song is long and low and feral as fog fingers moves like cat soft slither over the hills of her she melts into the shadow your impression makes on her opening door |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: What's in your coffee, Martie...and please pass the cream...this is delicious, and I need a dollop now please, to top off this wonderful delight... Absolutely fantastic imagery... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
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She watches for you with her skin too open her safe place turning scarlet anticipation a drum that will not quiet as into the long day it plays her bursting I think perhaps you have been reading DS and have decided to rival him for imagery... very nicely done my friend. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
martie; you paint so lovely this image this lady in her woman way contimplating the morning very much enjoyed it |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
where across the tundra of her map your road creeps She watches for you with her skin too open her safe place turning scarlet anticipation a drum that will not quiet as into the long day it plays her bursting ================================== Oh good grief.....you can tell its spring in here...Im getting a tan from the slow burn in so many poems...and you KNOW I am loving it...its like Verbal raspberry tea LOL AND? IF I have a tundra on my map...I wouldnt have been able to make it so cool as this...and? my safe place needs to be scarlet!! rofl gawwwd I love the way you write. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
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*library* |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
YAY!!! Ooohhhhh...we all wish you a beautiful afternoon, sweet friend, this sparkles with sunshine and contemplation of peace! (kiss on cheek) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yep...I knew this was a Keeper the First Time I read it today.... |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Oh, Martie, you've really done it this time! What is it about spring, anyway? Yum, yum! Meticulously chosen words, and a keen, stirring poem. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
WoooW! This is great! My mouth is still open. I love it! ThisDiamond |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Shadows do indeed leave lasting impressions... much as your words do, Martie... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, My oh my |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ In shadow cast ... your phrasing leaves a beautiful impression~ Love n' hugs~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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