Open Poetry #20 |
Dear Mister Editor............ok, Larry |
Balladeer
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I found an error in the news that I would like to mention With hopes that you are kind enough to give it your attention, For, on the page announcing deaths, I found it rather queer That, though I searched from start to end, my name did not appear. Although it is a small mistake, I feel, in my condition, That I deserve at very least a little recognition. I can't believe you didn't know that I had passed away. You spelled the name right of my girl we buried yesterday. Or did you think those left behind can just go right on living, Faced with only emptiness and nothing left for giving? Taken from the only thing that kept my heart alive, How is it possible you'd think that I could still survive? Your writers on the evening shift must have heard the sound My torn heart made the moment that they placed her in the ground. Perhaps they thought a cold wind rose and blew with icy breath Instead of knowing it was me within the throes of death. Now that I have done my best to bring this fact to light I'm sure that you are willing to correct your oversight. Tomorrow in the morning news, please try to tell my side For, though I breathe, I feel as though I were the one who died. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Michael I think there are some things worse then death...such a heart breaking poem of feeling, deer. Left me rather speechless. |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
This is very powerful, Balladeer. It's not what I expected from the title. Very well done. ~sky You look inside my wild mind |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Oh Balladeer, this is so very sad indeed, sweet friend, I could never imagine anyones name bring forgotten or unmentioned like this, sweet friend, this upsets me greatly, but I know deep down that all of us won't rest until everyone knows what a special person Ginger as is Larry is and she is mentioned! (sad sigh) You have such a loving golden heart, sweet friend, we are all so fortunate to have such a friend like you, God Bless You! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (05-20-2002 09:51 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mike, Another excellent write. |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Michael ... this is a treasure for all who know this feeling ... you've captured it in a very profound way sweet poet. Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
You’ve put into gentle words how it feels to lose a loved one. For it is true that a part of us dies too. And when that loved one is a child, I’ve no doubt that it feels like we have died completely. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A difficult emotion, presented so tenderly. There is a reason I keep reading your poetry. |
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my3monkeytoes Member
since 2002-05-11
Posts 152In the Carolina Breeze |
Oh Balladeer... This is so creative, so touching, and so accurate a feeling, I'm sure. It is not those who have gone on to better grasses for which we are sad, it is for those left in earthly grasses, missing loved ones so. I love this writing, and I'm sure he does, too. ~Sydney McLean |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Michael, I like it everytime I read. Written with an understanding that conveys the truth. Thank you for your generosity and no permission was necessary but the consideration meant everything. P.S. Please explain to Noah the name "not mentioned" in the poem is the parents not the daughters. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
’Deer dearest heart your writing is without doubt so incredible it always expresses perfectly the feeling and this does. Your compassion, your ability to share your thoughts and feelings show what a really special man you are. I can see by Larry’s reply he values your words greatly, as do I. Perfect writing as always I love the way you’ve said it all. As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Oh Larry, I'm so very sorry if I read this poem the wrong way, I apologize for sometimes when I read poems I think of it one way because I am very sensitive and don't know what else to say! It is Ginger who must always be remembered and loved in our hearts, but the parents too must always be comforted and reached out to in times like these, so my heart goes out to you! Thank you so much for pointing that out for me, forgive me if I read this wrongly! (sigh) Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (05-20-2002 10:40 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Michael and Larry, I think this pretty well says the feelings of us all... Thanx 'Deer....I too, appreciated this one.. |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You are doing a pretty good job of leaving us speechless... |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Sigh~...I just can't imagine. Touching..so touching this is and I still pray for healing spirit..but wonder if anything would ever be the same..thank you for this..you both are wonderful men. The sharing here is worth so much more than you know to even me. Sincerely, Reg |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
special you are.... Greeneyes~ I would rather have one breath of his hair, |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Noah you dear sweet young man, I was teasing but needed for you to understand the 'Deers message. Please don't take offense. I still like you. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Michael, i wish i can say more than "grand write"..but this left me quite speechless |
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Christopher
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since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
i remember this one Michael. these are the poems of yours that make me a fan. Chris |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Michael~ *hugs* for you~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This is so true, so real, and so well written. Thank you. Nan |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Ouch ------ and yet, yes.... Sadly, yes. She said burn ... together. |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
incredible..... tears. Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Michael This was so wonderfully written and so very true. Thank you for your powerful words. Take care.....Sue Suetang |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Michael...I think that this is the very best poem, I have ever seen from you! I love the tender portrayal of the parent. I know that Larry must appreciate that, as I do...having also been in that position almost 2 yrs ago. You have written with such feeling, exactly how a parent feels when his/her child dies. I remember when Eric died...wondering why it was him....he had so many years to look forward to, such a bright future, a beautiful little family started.... I really thought it should have been me instead of him...indeed, at that moment...wished it had! thank you for sharing this with all of us. ~ big hugs Lyra |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
'Deer, every time I think i've got you figgered out you do something like this. really, really good writing here - you managed to be profound with being pedantic. as always, you impress. -Dave |
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Muys Member
since 2002-04-06
Posts 389The Netherlands |
Hello Michael when I read your poem So much emotion break out We all feeling sad. Hugs Muys |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Speechless has been used a lot in the replies.......I'm on the same wave length...... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This hit hard enough the first time I read it... now, it wrenches. *S* Beautifully written, Bal. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Baladeer this is really a soft one...it just keeps on touching me...James |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
You're the only one Deer, who can write this like it's done here. Admiration and big hugs coming your way. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Balladeer. My sincere condolences, my friend. Had I known, I would not have chosen this time for a challenge.Be well. We will continue this another day. Doc |
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Balladeer
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Thank you guys all for such heartfelt comments...I appreciate them and I'm sure Larry does, too. Dr. Moose...this poem was for Larry C's loss, not mine. But thanks for the courtesy... |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Balladeer, If I had read the entire thread, I probably would have known that. That's what I get for being too hasty. I'm sorry for your loss, Larry. Doc |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh my, I don't think I can be here anymore....I think I'm dying too...I'll have no water left in my body if I keep reading on...so traumatic, and so heart wrenching for Larry and for others who have lost. Makes a person not want to go on at all...if life has no meaning anymore. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Michael, I think this poem is the one that has had the greatest impact on me of all the ones that you have ever written. The truth contained within is a universal one. If someone didn't know the depths of grief and despair before reading it, they certainly would after reading it. Thanks for reposting it. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
'Deer, I shared this with many this week that are family and friends...thank you. Doc, Don't even think of letting the 'deer off the hook. Go get 'em. And my condolences in advance of the massacre. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
How could I have missed this, from the biggest heart in Florida! Michael that was a wonderful letter to the editor ((hugs)) ~* Tell someone in your family that you love them today *~ |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Michael, I got out my scrapbook this weekend and read this to my aunt and uncle who were visiting. I hold it dear. Thank you kind sir. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Balladeer
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I remember the time well, Larry. You're a hell of a man...peace to you |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
May I say, again...please... you have a gift in bringing to light those that should be remembered for the special times they gave others... Larry's loss...was our loss as well; we've come to know Ginger over the last two years; through poems like these; and tenacity like Larry's... for some people should never be forgotten. |
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