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Martie
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0 posted 2002-05-19 11:18 AM



Warm Bahaman Breeze

(it is dripping this morning in Southern California, and a rain storm is coming.  We need rain, still I consider how lucky I am to have a warm place to watch it from.  Not everyone is so lucky, or as possitive as the fictional character in this poem, written with thought to the homeless.)


In a rat-trap of boards
and rain drip, dripping,
Sweet William sat on a newspaper
whistlin’ a tune,
not a gloom tune,
but a light, high and winsome
like a warm Bahaman breeze tune.

Beside him were two bananas
splotched black mostly, but
still hinting of the yellow
of the place where they grew
sun-ripe and sturdy.
They were cast-offs now,
like himself,
Picked almost rotten
from the dumpster behind
the grocery store.

He already ate the curled lettuce,
and expired jar of Gerber’s pureed chicken,
washed it down with some rain water.
He was saving the bananas for last.

While he whistled he imagined the slick
sweet white and his pink tongue
rolling it back and forth
in his mouth,
afraid that it would be gone to soon,
before he was ready,
knew it would be gone for sure
once he started eating.

So he waited, whistlen’ a tune,
not a gloom tune,
but a light, high and winsome
like a warm Bahaman breeze tune.

Of course, he had never been there,
didn’t know a Bahaman breeze
from arctic wind chill.
He knew the length and breadth
of many places he had never been,
so he could taste these bananas
now, while he was whistlen’
and they tasted sweet.
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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2002-05-19 11:27 AM


Martie,
And this is a sweet treat. A lovely and expressive write. Enoyed

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2 posted 2002-05-19 01:30 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, your gorgeous words always light up these pages and whisper with a breeze of tropical sunshine! (kiss on cheek) I've never been there but I dream ever so much of going there and having many platanos, sweet friend, this is delightful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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3 posted 2002-05-19 07:44 PM


It's amazing what pleasure we can get out of things depending on our lot in life. To the hungry, a banana can be a godsend, to the more affluent, a commodity. In some ways, the less one has, the more pleasure one gets out of things that others overlook. You did a wonderful job here, Miss M
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4 posted 2002-05-20 10:00 AM


I can't improve or even equal what Balladeer said... I can just be grateful to be touched by Martie magic this morning. *S*
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5 posted 2002-05-20 10:07 AM



...afraid it would be gone too soon...

that is how your poetry leaves me,
gone too soon...

more, please...

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2002-05-20 04:37 PM


Like this...James
ethome
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7 posted 2002-05-20 04:46 PM


Ah Martie...such a tender hearted write. I can see the virtual clearly and the picture is sad but oh so sweet the way you bring warmth to the situation in this word picture! A subject well addressed too!
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8 posted 2002-05-20 09:54 PM


ms martie
wish I was there
oh...duh!  I am

dug it babe

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9 posted 2002-05-21 06:37 PM


Martie....

I could taste that banana....and I do know
the want to savor something that you really
enjoy eating...Sadly though,  I usually
gobble it down and wish I had not.

This is an excellent poem.  Very much
enjoyed.

Thanx!

Tim
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10 posted 2002-05-21 08:13 PM


An excellent write Martie.  Our lot in life is not always of our making, but our tune we whistle is...
enjoyed muchly.

Madame Chipmunk
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11 posted 2002-05-21 08:45 PM


Oh what vivid imagery you present here, Martie

Beside him were two bananas
splotched black mostly, but
still hinting of the yellow
of the place where they grew
sun-ripe and sturdy.
They were cast-offs now,
like himself,
Picked almost rotten
from the dumpster behind
the grocery store.

Wow!!!!!
~ Michigan hugs to California

Lyra

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"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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12 posted 2002-05-21 08:59 PM


This was wonderful as always Martie!
~Hugs to you dear poetess~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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